Notes About The Poem

Run Through My Mind

Give me an idea that I can use
and built on for the future.
Run through my mind and find something kind
overlooked to help me to endure.

Give me fables and legends of old;
all the enchanted stories.
Find something kind and run through my mind
supplanting negative memories.

Give me not only wisdom to see,
also the courage to lead.
Run through my mind and find something kind
to say to my fellow man in need.

Give me all your sorrows and the pain
that you’ve saved from your brothers. 
Find something kind and run through my mind
with the hope that I can bring others. 


POETIC FORM: ZaniLa Rhyme
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ZaniLa Rhyme
The following is an invented poetic form for which I have written several examples over the years. The ZaniLa Rhyme is a repeating form with an inverted refrain. It is, in essence, a syllabic form created by poet, Jan Turner. It consists of at least three 4-line stanzas; or six per the original design. It has 9 syllables per line in lines 1, 3 & 4, with the 2nd line having 7 syllables. The rhyme scheme: ab (c¹.c² –Internal Rhyme) b. The metre for L3 is: /**/ … /**/
Line three is a repeating line throughout. It contains leonine verse, divided into equal portions (syllable count), separated by a conjunction (which might remain static), resulting in the nine-syllable count. The title is derived from the first half of this line. The same line is repeated as the third line in each stanza, but the two sections of the internal rhyme are switched around in each following stanza. Thus, the line is repeated identically in each uneven numbered stanza, and the turned line, in each even number stanza. In the example, I have written it in italics and boldface for ease of reference. 
Each stanza starts with the same opening words (underlined for ease of reference) but continues with a different ending which is unrhymed with any part of the stanzas—it is progressive in its statement and carries the momentum of the poem forward.
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Flaherty Avatar
April 12, 2021 at 1:57 PM
Baie Mooi Suzette Give us all Something kind to run through all of our minds On and then Repeat Repeat Repeat
Lamoureux Avatar
March 26, 2021 at 4:59 AM
Hi Sus, I see you put a lot of thought into your writing. Thanks as well for the explanation. Blessings Rick.
Richards Avatar
March 26, 2021 at 8:47 PM
Thank you, Rick. Milt asked, and I delivered :)) ~Sus
Hankins Avatar
March 23, 2021 at 1:44 PM
Hi Sus. I'm not sure exactly what ZaniLa Rhyme is. Can you give a bit of explanation? I liked your poem very much.
Richards Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 5:17 PM
You are welcome :))
Hankins Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 8:38 AM
This is fascinating! I shall give it a try when I have a subject or theme that lends itself to this form. Looks like it could be a bit complicated, but not insurmountable! Thanks!
Richards Avatar
March 24, 2021 at 12:11 AM
Hi, Milton. I have now added a description of the form under my poem (in my own words as I find the design description on the internet a bit too stilted). Thank you for your kind comment :-)
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