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Picture Prompt: Every night I have this dream. I'm running, but I'm not going anywhere. It's like I'm stuck. When I wake up, I feel as if there is something that I forgot...

- Run For Life -

To share a painful dive
deserves credit
I was terrified
Police groped blindly in this chase -
a psychopathic serial killer
A cold knife blade against the body
is in every way a mental abuse
Even if you're trying to gain control on all
the pieces that are missing in the moment
Run ... run ... run for your life

Beads of sweat drip from the forehead
taste of blood in the mouth
I have no idea where the forces came from
had to fight from start to finish
in this life-threatening situation

Run ... run ... run until you are exhausted
I did not have much strength left
But the alternative would have been horrible
The world suddenly turned black
I woke up in the hospital one day later
No one can distance themselves from this feeling
The experience is forever in my backpack






10/08/2020
Sun :) - A-L Andresen :)
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INFLICTIONS Poetry Contest
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2nd place in the contest


- a fictional poem :)
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Deepa Avatar
August 26, 2020 at 10:28 PM
My nerves had goosebumps as I read your fiction dear Anne mam.. Congratulations on your win in the contest.:-) Keep writing and keep inspiring us. Take care.Much love:-)
Andresen Avatar
August 27, 2020 at 1:25 AM
- Deepa, many thanks for the visit, comments and congratulations :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
One Avatar
August 15, 2020 at 4:00 AM
A very dark and disturbing take on the contest... Congratulations on your placement in the contest.
Andresen Avatar
August 27, 2020 at 1:24 AM
- Thank you very much for my place on your winning list, S.O. :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Neumann Avatar
August 12, 2020 at 2:15 AM
What a story. You should write a short story about it ...
Andresen Avatar
August 12, 2020 at 4:49 AM
- ... this is a "short" story, Kai :))) - Many thanks for your comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Romios Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 9:36 AM
Great dramatic verse, was running with you all the way. Good luck in the Contet Panagiota xx
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 12:09 PM
- Thank you for running with me, Panagiota :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Trifiatis Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 4:47 AM
Captivating writing that keeps the reader's nerves on edge dearest, Anne-Lise. Wonderfully done. Hugs xxx
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 12:07 PM
- Murder is undeniably an extreme act, Demetrios - There are many studies that have shown that people with mental illness are overrepresented among the perpetrators - Many thanks for your comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Mcintosh Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 4:27 AM
Wow! Such a expressive and impressive poem. Deserving of a win for sure. God bless you dear friend!
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 12:03 PM
- A lot of evil in our world ... it's sad to think about, Gina - Many thanks for your words and visits to my poem :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Daniel Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 2:21 AM
Could feel the inflicted terror and the threat, Anne-lise:)
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 12:00 PM
- A painful feeling, Jo ... something no one can forget - Many thanks for the lovely comment :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Kauffman Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 9:30 PM
Stunning depiction of a horrific experience, Anne-Lise. Compelling story of survival. I have a friend who encountered a serial killer from Seattle and survived a ride in the famed VW. Best of luck in the contest. Very creative entry!
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:58 AM
- Surviving is probably all you think about in such a situation ... hope everything goes well with your friend - Thank you very much, Sam - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Parker Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 2:14 PM
you took a deep dive poet, well done
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:56 AM
- Jepp ... - Many thanks for your comments, Frederic :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 1:06 PM
You shine a bright light on what a nightmare event, like the one describe, can be. They make an impact that lasts for ever. Well done, Anne-Lise.
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:55 AM
- Like a wound that will never heal, Vijay ... thank you so much for your support :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Proxenos Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 12:12 PM
Imagine being followed by a serial killer and you really don't know which way to go, terrifying, but so many women are abused raped and killed, that the situation is quite horrific these days. Well penned Anne-Lise Blessings, Jennifer.
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:53 AM
- I'm glad I have not experienced such things ... I would never dare to go out alone - Many thanks for your comments, my sister Jenny :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Devonshire Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 11:04 AM
What a nightmare - being chased by a serial killer. Your poem is compelling, Sunshine. Keep running! And best wishes in the contest. Hugs, Carolyn
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:51 AM
- A real nightmare, Carolyn ... Most of us have experienced it ... waking up with a nightmare ... sweaty and scared :) - Always nice to see you, thank you very much :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Sands Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 10:40 AM
Very powerful and true how things stay in the backpack as you point out in the last line. Great one Anne-Lise :)
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:43 AM
- Experiences that leave deep traces, Heidi - Thank you very much for your comments :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Raven Avatar
August 10, 2020 at 8:06 AM
Hi Anne-Lise, the fear resonates through this dark, deep and powerful write you have laid before us. The dark emotions are relished on the tongue as one speaks out the words. The emotions seem to flow so darkly, so easily. This one has to be a fave. Have a wonderful Monday. Love and Hugs....Mike. XX
Andresen Avatar
August 11, 2020 at 11:42 AM
- I'm glad it's a fictional poem ... I'm not that good at running :))) - Many thanks for your support and especially thanks for your fave, Mike :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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