Rudolph's Broken Leg

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Written December 15. 2024

for In a Tizzy, twelve lines or less contest

by Miranda Hawley

Santa's problem was Rudolph's crutch. And, also, Rudolph whined way too much. We need help pulling the sleigh tonight Another Reindeer might fix our plight. An animal rescue said, "we've got three dogs, ten birds, and an ocelot." We'll take the dogs and birds and thank you. Okay, so what should those ten birds do? Amazing, but they flew pretty good. Santa said he was betting they would. Dogs left 'neath trees for children to pet, and it was named, "The Best Christmas Yet" Although the weather was quite icy, Rudolph's broken leg healed nicely.

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Maria Williams

Date: 12/22/2024 11:59:00 PM

great team work Ann - Have a great Happy and Joyous Christmas. I saw a very funny clip of The deer team pulling and flying an Emirates A380 plane - here is the link - you may need to copy the link to play. Hugs Maria https://www.youtube.com/shorts/3Q-mzeOvcsg

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/17/2024 6:11:00 PM

Dear Ann, I enjoyed the whimsical Christmas magic of your poem. Wonderful holiday imagery and rhymes had me smiling with delight. I'm glad "Rudolph's broken leg healed nicely." He'll be ready to go next year! Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan

Dr. Shakira Nandini

Date: 12/16/2024 10:04:00 PM

This poem is humorous and delightful, capturing the spirit of Christmas with a lighthearted and whimsical narrative. Rudolph's predicament and Santa's struggle convey the idea that creative and unconventional solutions can sometimes work in surprising ways. The poem's tone is simple yet engaging, and the inclusion of unexpected animal helpers—especially the birds—adds a unique and amusing twist to the story. The resolution, where the birds successfully pull the sleigh and the dogs bring joy to children, highlights themes of teamwork, resourcefulness, and spreading happiness. Additionally, the ending with Rudolph's recovery provides a cheerful and satisfying conclusion, reinforcing a sense of hope and joy. This poem is both entertaining and heartwarming, appealing to readers of all ages.

Ann Peck
Date: 12/17/2024 9:15:00 AM

Thank you so very much for your amazing and informative critique! You covered so many topics, it made a great lesson. I think others can learn from reading it.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 12/16/2024 11:16:00 AM

Love your Christmas whimsy, Ann. Don't know how I have missed your poems lately. Too much to do and too little time, I guess. Loved bathing in your playfulness and so happy that Rudolph healed. Santa was indeed resourceful! Blessings to you! Best wishes for the contest! Blessings of comfort and joy to you!

Ann Peck
Date: 12/29/2024 11:32:00 AM

Thanks so much, Sam, and Blessings to you, too! Tis the season to get exhausted also, and I didn't have that much to do! I hope the world can find peace somehow.