Rose Thorn

Memories of your dress fiddling
your legs in the summer
night breeze
made my heart to leap with ecstacy
that can light a bulb.

The sweet fruit cakes that you have made
for our anniversaries
have been finger-licking good.

.......but.......someone.......a man......
holding holding your hips
and gazing at your face,
is the LAST thing I expected to see;
the album of you and I shrank
at lightning speed at that instant!

The sight left me and you
in love as a myth.........

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 3/4/2014 11:14:00 PM
Ouch! Very real stuff, this. It's difficult to wax all poetic with pain that real and that raw that it taints years of memories in an instant. Great write. Grats on your win. Christopher Thor Britt
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 3/5/2014 12:57:00 AM
Thanks for your applause and kind comments Christopher. :)
Date: 3/4/2014 12:21:00 AM
Sad betrayal. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 3/4/2014 8:17:00 AM
Thanks for applauding me Joyce! :)
Date: 3/3/2014 1:17:00 PM
this poem leaves me wondering if the "myth" is still being lived. The anniversaries hint at a long term relationship and the shrinking album at a slow demise. nicely written word pictures. Congrats on the win.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 3/3/2014 11:10:00 PM
Thanks for your review and kind comment John. Your work is a great winning piece worth of myriads of applause.
Date: 3/3/2014 8:12:00 AM
Thought provoking write on betrayal. Congrats on the win, teddy
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 3/3/2014 8:45:00 AM
I appreciate your praise Dr. Ram Mehta! :-)
Date: 3/3/2014 7:36:00 AM
This one if full of gripping, powerful, sadness. Congratulations on your win.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 3/3/2014 8:44:00 AM
Thank you for your applause Monterey! :-)
Date: 3/3/2014 7:25:00 AM
Congrats on the win Teddy .A great one is this.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 3/3/2014 8:43:00 AM
Thank you very much KAYOD5! :-)
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