Rose and Go On Son

~~~~GO ON... SON~~~~

At the edge of your nail
dancing of success
requesting for time and effort
from you, to have a grasp
I needs must sweat
to have endless acquire
What one acquires with one's sweat
goes endless years
My son, what sweat you've shed
to say it is enough
next steps that lies forth you
maybe the key to success
So relax not
in pursuing your dream.



~~~~ROSE~~~~

At the coastline of a stream
stood a beautiful rose
I wondered, had she a mermaid
but fresh from head to toe
without a fish tail
A thoughtless wind
tossing to and fro her attire
as a swaying kite
I moved to her
within her angelic eyes
A chime of lonelyness
Like a ringing-bell
My heart danced
singing song of infatuation
I wanted to say HI girl
Suddenly, I heard humming
Of a speedboat from afar
She smiled; is it for me?
Is the smile for me?
I thought
She moved toward the guy
and then into the boat
Anger smiled within me
the surf burst into laughing
I watched them
as they begin to go
till they vanished within empty space.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Makama Avatar
April 30, 2016 at 2:18 PM
Its been a while I visited.. I have also not been online for a while due to my work but I am back now and this piece is just the perfect start I need to come back home to my wonderful poetrysoup. This is amazing, beautiful and a high seven! Well done friend
Williams Gault Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 11:33 AM
One must work hard to achieve a dream, great message in Go on Son. Rose, turned out to be an unattainable dream, but perhaps you have a similar rose in reality. Much enjoyed both poems!
May Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 10:27 PM
Very well penned AM...A7...
Medders Tobechi Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 3:15 PM
I like the one about the sweat and the effort, That is soooo true..
Allison Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 7:42 AM
beautifully penned but so sad Afolabi:-( hugs Jan xx
A   Avatar
March 6, 2016 at 9:45 PM
awesome poem. LINDA
Horsman Avatar
February 24, 2016 at 4:19 PM
Oh just found these, wonderful inspiring poems..
Tor Avatar
February 22, 2016 at 6:13 AM
Afolabi where are you my friend miss you???
Delaney Avatar
February 11, 2016 at 12:49 PM
I do love the contrasts between these two, The escape from earthy duty into a dream of romance. Enjoyed the read this morning. SuZ
Dunn Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 7:10 PM
Dear Afolabi Love the passionate and soltry feeling in this work, nicely portrayed imagery, just wonderful, cheri and thanks for the comment on my work as well, enjoyed it, cheri
Muideen Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 1:45 AM
Thank you acheri, this gem was written with immense feeling and emotion. I appreciate your dropping by. love.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
February 1, 2016 at 3:47 AM
Soft and tender are your words A.M.. i enjoyed the read~Olive ELoisa =`)
Muideen Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 1:45 AM
thank you for loving these gem and for taking your time to read and comment. bless you.
Muideen Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 1:39 AM
thank you for loving these gem and for taking your time to read and comment. bless you.
Dietrich Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 8:11 PM
ahh, that would leave you wish sadness (rose), yes, I enjoyed seeing these tonight. What made you post two different titles? I really liked them both.
Muideen Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 1:37 AM
I wonder, can wealth only satisfied LOVE? Sorry for my late reply. My posting of this is due to the stuff i discussed with you a few days ago. I will be more busy this days, although it is for a while. I am preparing for the sequence it requires. Thank you for the support.
Andresen Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 2:54 PM
- The destiny closes some doors in your life ...... but others doors open just for you - Touching and lovely poem, Afolabi - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Muideen Avatar
February 2, 2016 at 1:28 AM
i really appr.eciate your dropping by. thank you
Trifiatis Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 5:33 PM
Some things are not meant to happen but the feelings of the poem are superb and vivid is the description, dear A.M.!
Muideen Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 2:14 PM
that is true Sir. While she smiled I thought it was for me, but for the guy. Thank you for dropping by.
Sage Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 5:17 PM
excellent write AM, sometimes somethings aren't meant to be...Rose must be really beautiful
Muideen Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 2:12 PM
Some of our wants are not acquire as we thought. Rose is a personification and a metaphor of the girl. Thank you for dropping by.
Guzzi Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 5:03 PM
I enjoyed your verse this eve, thanks! Light & Love
Muideen Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 2:05 PM
Thank you for taking time to read me.
Callus Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 4:58 PM
How sad, Afolabi...but perhaps some people are more attracted to money and the high life than to an honest and sincere person! But keep on searching...perhaps round the next corner...or the one after that...who knows! ~ // paul
Muideen Avatar
January 31, 2016 at 2:05 PM
Yes, that is true. Most of them like attractive things and lie instead of honest and sincere. I wonder why.
Muideen Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 5:02 PM
Thanks for dropping by my friend, appreciate your support........A.M.
Smith Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 3:28 PM
So beautiful but so sad...one day my friend...one day
Muideen Avatar
January 30, 2016 at 3:33 PM
Thanks for the comment and for being the first to comment.
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