Rose and Go On Son

~~~~GO ON... SON~~~~

At the edge of your nail
dancing of success
requesting for time and effort
from you, to have a grasp
I needs must sweat
to have endless acquire
What one acquires with one's sweat
goes endless years
My son, what sweat you've shed
to say it is enough
next steps that lies forth you
maybe the key to success
So relax not
in pursuing your dream.



~~~~ROSE~~~~

At the coastline of a stream
stood a beautiful rose
I wondered, had she a mermaid
but fresh from head to toe
without a fish tail
A thoughtless wind
tossing to and fro her attire
as a swaying kite
I moved to her
within her angelic eyes
A chime of lonelyness
Like a ringing-bell
My heart danced
singing song of infatuation
I wanted to say HI girl
Suddenly, I heard humming
Of a speedboat from afar
She smiled; is it for me?
Is the smile for me?
I thought
She moved toward the guy
and then into the boat
Anger smiled within me
the surf burst into laughing
I watched them
as they begin to go
till they vanished within empty space.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 4/30/2016 2:18:00 PM
Its been a while I visited.. I have also not been online for a while due to my work but I am back now and this piece is just the perfect start I need to come back home to my wonderful poetrysoup. This is amazing, beautiful and a high seven! Well done friend
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Date: 4/1/2016 11:33:00 AM
One must work hard to achieve a dream, great message in Go on Son. Rose, turned out to be an unattainable dream, but perhaps you have a similar rose in reality. Much enjoyed both poems!
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Date: 3/31/2016 10:27:00 PM
Very well penned AM...A7...
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Date: 3/31/2016 3:15:00 PM
I like the one about the sweat and the effort, That is soooo true..
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Date: 3/31/2016 7:42:00 AM
beautifully penned but so sad Afolabi:-( hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/6/2016 9:45:00 PM
awesome poem. LINDA
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Date: 2/24/2016 4:19:00 PM
Oh just found these, wonderful inspiring poems..
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Date: 2/22/2016 6:13:00 AM
Afolabi where are you my friend miss you???
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Date: 2/11/2016 12:49:00 PM
I do love the contrasts between these two, The escape from earthy duty into a dream of romance. Enjoyed the read this morning. SuZ
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Date: 2/1/2016 7:10:00 PM
Dear Afolabi Love the passionate and soltry feeling in this work, nicely portrayed imagery, just wonderful, cheri and thanks for the comment on my work as well, enjoyed it, cheri
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Date: 2/2/2016 1:45:00 AM
Thank you acheri, this gem was written with immense feeling and emotion. I appreciate your dropping by. love.
Date: 2/1/2016 3:47:00 AM
Soft and tender are your words A.M.. i enjoyed the read~Olive ELoisa =`)
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Date: 2/2/2016 1:45:00 AM
thank you for loving these gem and for taking your time to read and comment. bless you.
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Date: 2/2/2016 1:39:00 AM
thank you for loving these gem and for taking your time to read and comment. bless you.
Date: 1/31/2016 8:11:00 PM
ahh, that would leave you wish sadness (rose), yes, I enjoyed seeing these tonight. What made you post two different titles? I really liked them both.
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Date: 2/2/2016 1:37:00 AM
I wonder, can wealth only satisfied LOVE? Sorry for my late reply. My posting of this is due to the stuff i discussed with you a few days ago. I will be more busy this days, although it is for a while. I am preparing for the sequence it requires. Thank you for the support.
Date: 1/31/2016 2:54:00 PM
- The destiny closes some doors in your life ...... but others doors open just for you - Touching and lovely poem, Afolabi - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/2/2016 1:28:00 AM
i really appr.eciate your dropping by. thank you
Date: 1/30/2016 5:33:00 PM
Some things are not meant to happen but the feelings of the poem are superb and vivid is the description, dear A.M.!
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Date: 1/31/2016 2:14:00 PM
that is true Sir. While she smiled I thought it was for me, but for the guy. Thank you for dropping by.
Date: 1/30/2016 5:17:00 PM
excellent write AM, sometimes somethings aren't meant to be...Rose must be really beautiful
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Date: 1/31/2016 2:12:00 PM
Some of our wants are not acquire as we thought. Rose is a personification and a metaphor of the girl. Thank you for dropping by.
Date: 1/30/2016 5:03:00 PM
I enjoyed your verse this eve, thanks! Light & Love
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Date: 1/31/2016 2:05:00 PM
Thank you for taking time to read me.
Date: 1/30/2016 4:58:00 PM
How sad, Afolabi...but perhaps some people are more attracted to money and the high life than to an honest and sincere person! But keep on searching...perhaps round the next corner...or the one after that...who knows! ~ // paul
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Date: 1/31/2016 2:05:00 PM
Yes, that is true. Most of them like attractive things and lie instead of honest and sincere. I wonder why.
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Afolabi Muideen
Date: 1/30/2016 5:02:00 PM
Thanks for dropping by my friend, appreciate your support........A.M.
Date: 1/30/2016 3:28:00 PM
So beautiful but so sad...one day my friend...one day
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Date: 1/30/2016 3:33:00 PM
Thanks for the comment and for being the first to comment.
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