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Romance In the Rain

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We strolled for an hour in a rain shower My face looked quite sour, I felt very dour You found a wild flower I didn’t glower! By a tall tower we found a bower I laid our picnic for us to devour You kissed me with power I didn’t cower! Rhymers Delight Contest Sponsored by John Hamilton 6 lines 10 syllables checked with how many syllables 01~07~17

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Darren White

Date: 1/15/2017 10:06:00 AM

I love it Jan, even though it rained and you looked sour :) Congratulations!

Mark Martin

Date: 1/12/2017 3:39:00 PM

Creative Jan. Like it! Congrats! :-)

Sandra Haight

Date: 1/10/2017 7:06:00 PM

A great poem with internal/ending Monorhymes, Jan. At least the story ended happily! Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra

Paul Schneiter

Date: 1/10/2017 6:14:00 PM

Jan is anything but a fouler all her poems you may scour. * * * Oh such fun combined with extraordinary creativity. Thanks for sharing, Jan. hugs x x x

Paul Callus

Date: 1/10/2017 3:24:00 PM

I find that rain and romance have a lot in common...they both produce heavenly music! Congratulations on this fine win, Jan! Hugs // paul

Joanna Daniel

Date: 1/10/2017 5:24:00 AM

A lovely romantic monorhyme, Jan:) congratulations:)

Lewis Nyaga

Date: 1/9/2017 11:45:00 PM

Jan.. beautiful poem you have penned, and the rhyme masterfully delivered..//Hugs & blessings

Janis Thompson

Date: 1/9/2017 11:37:00 PM

Sounds like a very romantic tryst. Well written and congrats.

Afzal Nusker

Date: 1/9/2017 10:47:00 PM

Quite frolicking must have been that picnic. Congratulations on your win.

Joseph May

Date: 1/9/2017 1:58:00 PM

A romantic stroll ending with a kiss...Nicely penned Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/9/2017 6:23:00 PM

Thanks Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 1/9/2017 6:35:00 AM

Really well done Jan and I loved the theme. This flowed smoothly and the rhymes we spot on. Beautifully written my friend. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/9/2017 8:10:00 AM

Thanks Chris I found it quite a challenge I hope John likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 1/8/2017 8:14:00 PM

I like your rhymes, Jan. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/9/2017 1:19:00 AM

Thanks Agnes it was quite challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/8/2017 6:22:00 PM

very cool how you got all the rhymes in and I think they were all , for ME, true rhymes. I am seeing others not using all perfect rhymes in their poems. Hope you place, sweetie!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/9/2017 1:18:00 AM

I use rhymezone which seems to cater for the US dialect so I hope John likes my poem I did find it quite a challenge to write and get some sort of story running through it:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 1/8/2017 3:21:00 PM

WoW..You are such a charming and romantic lady..Lovely sweet friend.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2017 4:06:00 PM

Pure fiction for the contest Charma lol I find writing romance difficult and it was a really challenging contest with the rhyme scheme:-) Hugs jan xx

Maurice Rigoler

Date: 1/8/2017 11:52:00 AM

Good use of monorhymes, Jan. See your inbox for my email. Thanks as always for stopping by. BTW, we had 11 inches of snow dropped on us last night! And it's only January! / M

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2017 4:05:00 PM

Thanks for the mail Maurice I do appreciate your support in my writing endeavours:- Oh gosh all that snow stay safe and warm and don't go out unless you have to!:-) hugs jan xx Our little Island grinds to a halt when snow falls lol

Augustus Black

Date: 1/8/2017 6:26:00 AM

How sweet and full of romance this poem is. You have got a great writing rhythm in this form. It just looks like a great love story, a very powerful and courageous love. I like your actions in this write. This will defiantly get good ranking. All the best for the contest.

Augustus Black
Date: 1/8/2017 9:42:00 AM

Ya! He will like it.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/8/2017 7:00:00 AM

Thanks for such a postivie comment Augustus. I found it quite a challenging write and I hope John likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

John Beam

Date: 1/7/2017 7:41:00 PM

Don't kiss and tell, written well and this poem well, it is also:)

John Beam
Date: 1/7/2017 7:48:00 PM

yes, with meaning but you got it!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 7:42:00 PM

Thanks so much John I found the monorhyme quite a challenge to write:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 1/7/2017 7:04:00 PM

Ok I have to admit, I am a good kisser!!! This is so beautiful!

Darren White
Date: 1/15/2017 10:04:00 AM

LOL, pics or it didn't happen!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 7:15:00 PM

Shhh Arthur I was trying to keep our friendship secret now its in the open lol!!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Phatt Matt

Date: 1/7/2017 4:53:00 PM

beautiful you will come out tops goodluck!~phatt

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 5:14:00 PM

Thanks Phatt it was quite a challenge I hope John likes my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/7/2017 4:47:00 PM

Hi Jan, This is good take on the contest theme. You painted lovely picture with your words. I liked what I saw. I wish you the best luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Alexis Y.
Date: 1/7/2017 6:02:00 PM

I found it to a challenge too:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 5:15:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I found the rhyming quite a challenge!:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 1/7/2017 2:08:00 PM

Great Monorhyme Jan, best wishes in the contest...

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 5:15:00 PM

Thanks Charlie I don't think I've written this form before it was quite a challenge:-) hugs Jan xx

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/7/2017 1:38:00 PM

You have painted a lovely picture, here. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 5:15:00 PM

Thanks Dane Ann:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/7/2017 12:55:00 PM

- Not always tempting to be romantic in the rain ... wet and cold - A lovely poem, Jan - Good luck in the contest - I been at Stord today :) - ... the last week I tried to post some small "smile poems" ... but, it is you who are expert in that area :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/7/2017 5:16:00 PM

I was only talking with mum about Stord last week and what a beautiful country you live in - its great for her to reminisce gets her memory working!:-) hugs Jan xx