Rock Star

Determined to succeed He'd play that guitar 'til his fingers'd bleed Once, Kyle aspired to be a rock star ~ 'til sped to the manicurist in an ambulance car

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Deb M

Date: 12/12/2023 3:47:00 PM

Ewww thats A bit extreme! Clever fun write BB….Debx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/12/2023 1:20:00 PM

Such a twist! I think he “nail”ed it!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/12/2023 6:48:00 AM

I enjoyed your fun/cute write. Poor guy... Guess he loves his music. Have a great day writing away.............

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/12/2023 4:36:00 AM

cute story told in just a few words. I love the twist and word play in the last couplet. ...have a great day, Sara

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/12/2023 2:06:00 AM

How sad for Kyle. Music isn't for everyone. I liked the rhyme and picturesque description.

Judy Ball

Date: 12/12/2023 1:19:00 AM

Ooohoo! That's what I call just a tad obsessive. Too cute Gershon. This one made me smile. God Bless and Merry Christmas, JB

Karen Jones

Date: 12/12/2023 12:48:00 AM

Wow that's some dedication playing guitar till fingers bleed! Tragic couplet!

Bill Baker

Date: 12/11/2023 9:57:00 PM

Nasty twist in these couplets, gw. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, my friend. BB