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Oh affluent lady looking so fine, hurrying scurrying for thy taste of wine, but one can see beneath the paint, the scars that behold you of late. Consumption foremost is on your mind, just to taste the fruit of the vine, your eyes show testament of your worry, this only giving fuel to your hurry. With shaking hand your flagon to fill, every drop of value when paying the bill, an embarrassing glance though not a care, your pains deep down I feel and share. A hasty retreat your meal well hidden, forbearance in mind will be forbidden, a quick shot is needed just to please, your unsociable craving to be eased. The Jag’s outside all bright and gleaming, her fight with the keys the body screaming, she just wants out and away, so she can measure the rest of the day. © Harry J Horsman 1989

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Date: 12/9/2012 9:32:00 AM
interesting one not that I mind a bit of the fruit of the vine but I never measure it..a bottle will do xx
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Date: 9/24/2012 9:48:00 PM
This is unusual from you I think. A woman dying for that taste of wine. and making her a rich woman in a jag. Yes a very interesting one, Harry.
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Date: 2/29/2012 1:43:00 AM
I"ll have to read the first to understand the second. That's not a bad thing. The second made me want to read the first. :-)
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Date: 10/6/2010 7:05:00 AM
so sad an existence...enjoyed reading today!
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Date: 10/5/2010 6:01:00 AM
Very very interesting and enjoyable write, though I missed the male part.harry
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Date: 10/4/2010 11:18:00 AM
From what I am reading this afternoon it looks as if everyone found some inspiration to write this weekend. Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry with us today Harry. Love, Carol
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Date: 10/4/2010 9:09:00 AM
Great write! I have to go read the one about the male, Harry.. there millions, I believe who seek after the fruit of the vine for comfort, as a pain reliever, etc. Sad thing is the remedy last for a short time, and the problems multipy. Peace, Audrey
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