Nette Onclaud Poet Verse

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River's Life

Garlands I hold on  blue river’s last  sunset- path today

It’s babbling never the same each time my heart cruises it;

That I might grow old and forget an alcove by the shore

As smokey ripples lead me through a psalm of waved memoirs--

To offer wreaths for my child… lost, drowned in riverbed’s womb.




River Line Contest   11/20/2016

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Samiha Zubair December 2, 2016 at 5:15 PM Mesmerizingly spilled on paper.Congratulations

Reason A. Poteet November 30, 2016 at 1:33 AM So poignant for those who have the experience to which you write. Congrats, nette, on a well-done piece.

Barry Stebbings November 28, 2016 at 6:22 AM Congratulations on your top place, Nette. Beautiful and poignant. Barry

Darren White November 28, 2016 at 1:09 AM Nette, so beautiful and sad, and that picture... Congratulations!

Joanna Daniel November 28, 2016 at 12:01 AM This is poignantly sad and deserves the top honours, Nette:) congratulations:)

Janis Medders Tobechi November 27, 2016 at 10:37 PM A haunting poem that is very well written. Shows your talent. Congratulations on your 1st place win.

Laura Leiser November 27, 2016 at 10:25 PM Congrats on your top win, Nette! A sad, yet poignant poem..

Kim Rodrigues November 27, 2016 at 6:46 PM Didn't see the ending coming. Nicely done! Congrats, Nette!

Jan Allison November 27, 2016 at 6:38 PM oh gosh Nette this is so so sad I feel emotional reading your beautiful lines many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight November 27, 2016 at 6:30 PM Lovely, Nette. Congratulations on your podium win! Hugs, Sandra

Tamal Kundu November 27, 2016 at 6:21 PM Poignant and powerful. congrats on the win, Nette!

Supraja Kannan November 21, 2016 at 9:48 PM Deep and beautiful... Loved it... A 7... Good luck with the contest...

Lyva Marty November 21, 2016 at 9:17 AM A river line deeply immersed in a float of poetic excellence-- sullen, soft, and radiant!

Duke Beaufort November 21, 2016 at 6:39 AM Life is full of sadness for all of us. It is always there to be triggered. Your poem is beautiful be it allegorical or a real life experience. It works in all ways. I feel you have made a connection to me with this work. It has such depth. Thank-you for the kindness and humanity of this work of yours.

Wendy Rycroft November 21, 2016 at 5:01 AM Its very sad but you paint a very poetic psalm x

Banjo Casto November 20, 2016 at 8:09 AM Your compelling poem took me to the edge of river's life--somberly beautiful!

Connie Marcum Wong November 19, 2016 at 10:35 PM Nette, such beautiful words to linger in the soul and poignant reverie. 7 ; )

David Mohn November 19, 2016 at 9:15 PM this is exceptional Nette…fabulous :)

Arthur Vaso November 19, 2016 at 7:36 PM AH, this is so beautiful, in so many ways, and one more than you may think! So Lovely!

Heidi Sands November 19, 2016 at 3:53 PM Wow , very good one Nette! Good luck in the contest.

Anne-Lise Andresen November 19, 2016 at 3:03 PM - A moving and wonderful poem, Nette - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)