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Garlands I hold on blue river’s last sunset- path today It’s babbling never the same each time my heart cruises it; That I might grow old and forget an alcove by the shore As smokey ripples lead me through a psalm of waved memoirs-- To offer wreaths for my child… lost, drowned in riverbed’s womb. River Line Contest 11/20/2016

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Samiha Zubair

Date: 12/2/2016 5:15:00 PM

Mesmerizingly spilled on paper.Congratulations

Reason A. Poteet

Date: 11/30/2016 1:33:00 AM

So poignant for those who have the experience to which you write. Congrats, nette, on a well-done piece.

Barry Stebbings

Date: 11/28/2016 6:22:00 AM

Congratulations on your top place, Nette. Beautiful and poignant. Barry

Darren White

Date: 11/28/2016 1:09:00 AM

Nette, so beautiful and sad, and that picture... Congratulations!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/28/2016 12:01:00 AM

This is poignantly sad and deserves the top honours, Nette:) congratulations:)

Janis Medders Tobechi

Date: 11/27/2016 10:37:00 PM

A haunting poem that is very well written. Shows your talent. Congratulations on your 1st place win.

Laura Leiser

Date: 11/27/2016 10:25:00 PM

Congrats on your top win, Nette! A sad, yet poignant poem..

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 11/27/2016 6:46:00 PM

Didn't see the ending coming. Nicely done! Congrats, Nette!

Jan Allison

Date: 11/27/2016 6:38:00 PM

oh gosh Nette this is so so sad I feel emotional reading your beautiful lines many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 11/27/2016 6:30:00 PM

Lovely, Nette. Congratulations on your podium win! Hugs, Sandra

Tamal Kundu

Date: 11/27/2016 6:21:00 PM

Poignant and powerful. congrats on the win, Nette!

Supraja Kannan

Date: 11/21/2016 9:48:00 PM

Deep and beautiful... Loved it... A 7... Good luck with the contest...

Lyva Marty

Date: 11/21/2016 9:17:00 AM

A river line deeply immersed in a float of poetic excellence-- sullen, soft, and radiant!

Duke Beaufort

Date: 11/21/2016 6:39:00 AM

Life is full of sadness for all of us. It is always there to be triggered. Your poem is beautiful be it allegorical or a real life experience. It works in all ways. I feel you have made a connection to me with this work. It has such depth. Thank-you for the kindness and humanity of this work of yours.