River Theft - Haiku

River Theft – Haiku

Predator bird swoops
Bug dodges down to river
Trout bites, swallows whole
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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November 6, 2014 at 9:02 AM
Earl you need a 2 part verse you have a 3 part verse- 2 of the lines must connect grammatically & conceptually, not just conceptually (a trout leaps/swallowing the black flies:a hawk descends) see how lines 1 & 2 as I wrote them are connected grammatically by the verb LEAPS- hope that helps? Light & Love
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