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River Rising

RIVER RISING you creep up to my feet after days and days of rain (not forty days, forty nights), but biblical nonetheless. you beckon me to perform a virginia woolf, to slide a stone into my pocket and dip myself into your healing rush of silt and mud. it is a possibility, it is inviting, but there are no stones on the shore. you have washed them all away. you have taken even the possibility of taking a swim away from me. (you cannot (will not) be forgiven). i have thought about it. thought about accepting your invitation, but you have promised me nothing in return. not even the possibility of spitting me out whole, bruised, horribly damaged. perhaps, you should have offered me the chance to rise up, like you, like lazarus. horribly damaged, yes, but a second chance, nonetheless. Copyrighted March 13, 2011

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Date: 10/18/2012 9:03:00 PM
JIm, here I am with a be-lated :-) congratulations with your wonderful win in the " April, 2011 Contest " It is very nice to see you on this winning list..*'.*'.*' hip hip hooray. Good night :-) always~ PD
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Date: 10/27/2011 8:10:00 PM
Heartfelt and awesome imagery! Congratulations on your winnings! Well deserved.
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Date: 10/9/2011 6:15:00 AM
Beautiful poem painting a clear picture. I do have comments on the way brackets are used. The first closing bracket is behind "nights", but should be behind "nonetheless"; that way the whole sentence between brackets belongs together. Further down you have brackets within brackets, which I do not like. The bottom-line is that as a rule I do not like parentheses in poems.
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Date: 9/18/2011 5:51:00 AM
Wonderful visuals in this poem, I felt I was there. Stunning.
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Date: 9/10/2011 9:14:00 PM
Amazing imagery! Congratulations on a well-deserved win, Jim. Annalise
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Date: 8/28/2011 9:54:00 AM
CONGRATULATIONS~~~~really an amazing and well-deserved win~~~*-*junjun~~~~smile~~~~
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Date: 8/27/2011 8:36:00 PM
congratulations on this win! well done. Lee
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Date: 8/23/2011 7:59:00 PM
Congrats Jim on your wonderful win in PS International Contest ..dynamic piece luv..
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Date: 8/23/2011 4:07:00 PM
Congrats Jim on your finish in the poetry soup contest, no small accomplishment. God Bless. Vince
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Date: 8/23/2011 3:42:00 PM
Congratulations April, 2011 4th Place Contest Winner! Caryl Ramsdale
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Date: 8/23/2011 7:43:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in PoetrySoup's International Poetry Contest Jim. I am very happy for you. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/22/2011 4:39:00 PM
Congratulations Jim on your big win in the International Contest.Enjoyed.
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Date: 8/22/2011 2:41:00 PM
''perhaps you should have offered me a chance to rise up like you''....:)...loved reading..and congratulations to you for your win, Jim....
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Date: 8/22/2011 12:35:00 PM
Congratulations on the fourth place win this international contest, Jim
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Date: 8/22/2011 10:48:00 AM
A great job, Jim. I enjoyed your poem. Enjoy your winnings. Big smile. Agape, Moses
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Date: 8/22/2011 10:05:00 AM
Congratulations Jim on your fabulous Soup win with this wonderful write. Enjoy your honor, I enjoyed the read. Caryl
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Date: 8/22/2011 9:51:00 AM
What an excellent verse, Jim. So happy to see your winning in the Soup Admin's contest. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 8/22/2011 8:07:00 AM
Congrats on your success..Sara
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Date: 8/22/2011 8:05:00 AM
This is very intense, Jim. Many congrats on your amazing win in poetry soup international contest. *Cheers*
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Date: 8/22/2011 3:28:00 AM
Congratulations on a most deserved win Jim. Your imagery is just outstanding!
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Date: 8/21/2011 11:46:00 PM
Great job. Congrats.
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Date: 8/21/2011 11:22:00 PM
Powerfull narrative indeed. Many congratulations on your SUPER WIN in the Poetry Soup International Competition. Elaine
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Date: 8/2/2011 10:19:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through round one in the PoetrySoup International Poetry contest Jim. I wish you the best in the final round. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/31/2011 7:56:00 AM
Congratulations Jim on your well deserved feature this week. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/30/2011 6:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Jim
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