Rite of Passage

Is it any wonder that on a recruit's first day of service he is befuddled?
From day one he's told to do things by the numbers and his brain is muddled!
From the moment he stepped off the bus, mean ol' sergeants began to yell!
Sergeants, it seemed, were born to make life for raw recruits a living 'ell!

He was herded to the barbershop where he was shorn of all his hair!
He was as bald as a billiard ball, but the barbers didn't seem to care!
Next on his rite of passage was to strip bare as the day he was delivered,
To be poked, prodded and given shots as he moved along and shivered!

Sergeants double-timed him to the quartermaster to be issued all his gear,
Still smarting from all those shots he'd just received in his arms and rear!
He drew a gun, socks, drawers, uniforms and a couple of pairs of boots,
Then the sergeants taught him close order drill and how to make salutes!

The next stop was at the mess hall where cooks concocted dubious fare,
Mysterious vittles that in no way with his mom's cooking would compare!
He was double-timed to his barracks where he was assigned a sagging cot.
Along with fifty snoring and snorting troops, this was to be his hapless lot!

He aspired to be a fighter pilot but the tests he couldn't comprehend,
So he was assigned to the good ol' ground pounding infantry in the end!
At the sound of "Taps" he felt mighty blue as he collapsed on his bunk.
He was disillusioned with the whole affair and was in a dreadful funk!

Robert L. Hinshaw, CMSgt, USAF, Retired
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Date: 4/29/2012 3:41:00 PM
Bob H., another wonderful poem.. this one has me smiling.. especially with the way you described his billiard ball baldness.. never thought of a bald mans top... smooth as a Que ball... a very fine ending as well..enjoyed..pd
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Date: 4/29/2012 11:54:00 AM
lol, another witty write here, bob. i always wanted to join the navy, like my granddad, but i've got asthma. hope you've both had a great weekend
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Date: 4/29/2012 4:14:00 AM
Shhhhhhoe ! TY for going through all of this for our country dear poet ! I was 4Flat out rejected when I tried to join sir,( which broke my heart ) But many of my family have served ! My 32 year old is a StaffSgt at the present ! I always enjoy your writes! Have a blessed 'Retirement' Sir ! Much love, james
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Date: 4/28/2012 8:22:00 PM
Hi Robert; this is very good. It is never easy for the young recurits. I guess they promise them a lot of things and when they get there It is a different story. I guess you know all about it. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla
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Date: 4/28/2012 5:27:00 PM
I really enjoyed this satire, Bob. Yes, recruits lose their hair, get medical "pokes and prods" and have to march to the drum of a harsh sergeant. I was laughing out loud when you described the mess hall "where cooks concocted dubious fare" that couldn't compare to home cooking. Still our courageous soldiers grow through all this regiment to become some of our finest citizens. That includes you, Bob. Great work! Love, Carolyn
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