Home » Poems » Debbie Guzzi » Risque Business

Risque Business

The subway steams in August heat.
At 3 A.M. a lover’s tryst.
Alone at last two in one seat.
The subway steams in August heat.
Their limbs entwine and hips entreat.
He strokes her hair and steals a kiss.
The subway steams in August heat.
At 3 A.M. a lover’s tryst.

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/1/2013 2:47:00 PM

DG... , congratulations!! awesome "Triolet" ... xox~ LINDA

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/29/2013 12:21:00 PM

Passionate steamy winning work..Uniquely creative..Congrats..Sara

Skat A

Date: 8/24/2013 5:35:00 PM

wonderful......SKAT

Sandra Adams

Date: 8/23/2013 8:29:00 PM

nicely done....congrats on your win :)

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/23/2013 6:30:00 PM

Congratulations on your entry and win. Love,Joyce

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/23/2013 1:52:00 PM

Hmmmm.....I remember this scene .......hot !!! It's a little less risky when written as poetry......LOL !! (Tom Cruise........grew up...........or did he?) haha... Great poem, Deb!!

Joseph May

Date: 8/23/2013 8:49:00 AM

congrats on a fine win with this steamy write

Alozor Michael Ikechukwu

Date: 8/23/2013 7:33:00 AM

And yet another win. Congratulations on your win

Joyce Johnson

Date: 8/9/2010 3:52:00 PM

I haven's seen this movie but I am sure you caught the essence in this great triolet. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/6/2010 11:40:00 AM

Congratulations Deb on your win in Andrea Dietrich's contest "Movie Scene Triolet". This is the first time I have read a triolet or one that I actually have been made aware of should I say. I enjoyed reading yours Deb. Love, Carol

Steven Mossburg

Date: 8/5/2010 7:32:00 PM

Excellent! Your words fit this style really well. A well deserve win. congrats, Steve

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 8/5/2010 4:02:00 PM

When I saw this movie during this scene you could have heard a pin drop...the sexual tension in the room was overwhelming...and yet we "saw" nothing.... a marvel of acting, directing & filming & goodness the sound track!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/5/2010 2:57:00 PM

Deb, A BIG CONGRATS. truly my favorite triolet. STEAMY!!!!

Carrie Richards

Date: 8/5/2010 8:28:00 AM

Loved this movie then......and still do!!! (And must say, he stole more than a kiss on that speeding subway!!) and.............his mother's glass egg was the least of his problems!! Great pick.....Hip Hooray for you!!! Fun one to remember! :)

Jessica Arteaga

Date: 8/5/2010 8:05:00 AM

great scene! and congrats on your first place win with this cool poem :D

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/5/2010 8:03:00 AM

Congrats TEACH on your big first place win for this superb write from a great movie... enjoy your top spot for your top notch write.. perfection.. with luv.. pupil...

Sharon Tideswell

Date: 7/30/2010 4:23:00 AM

Enjoyed your triolet very much, very visual... and now the subway steams for a different reason ;) ~ Sharon :)