Debbie Guzzi Poet Triolet

Risque Business

The subway steams in August heat.
At 3 A.M. a lover’s tryst.
Alone at last two in one seat.
The subway steams in August heat.
Their limbs entwine and hips entreat.
He strokes her hair and steals a kiss.
The subway steams in August heat.
At 3 A.M. a lover’s tryst.

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Poet Destroyer A September 1, 2013 at 2:47 PM DG... , congratulations!! awesome "Triolet" ... xox~ LINDA

Sara Kendrick August 29, 2013 at 12:21 PM Passionate steamy winning work..Uniquely creative..Congrats..Sara

Skat A August 24, 2013 at 5:35 PM wonderful......SKAT

Sandra Adams August 23, 2013 at 8:29 PM nicely done....congrats on your win :)

Joyce Johnson August 23, 2013 at 6:30 PM Congratulations on your entry and win. Love,Joyce

Carrie Richards August 23, 2013 at 1:52 PM Hmmmm.....I remember this scene .......hot !!! It's a little less risky when written as poetry......LOL !! (Tom Cruise........grew up...........or did he?) haha... Great poem, Deb!!

Joseph May August 23, 2013 at 8:49 AM congrats on a fine win with this steamy write

Alozor Michael Ikechukwu August 23, 2013 at 7:33 AM And yet another win. Congratulations on your win

Joyce Johnson August 9, 2010 at 3:52 PM I haven's seen this movie but I am sure you caught the essence in this great triolet. Congratulations on your first place win. Love, Joyce

Carol Sunshine Brown August 6, 2010 at 11:40 AM Congratulations Deb on your win in Andrea Dietrich's contest "Movie Scene Triolet". This is the first time I have read a triolet or one that I actually have been made aware of should I say. I enjoyed reading yours Deb. Love, Carol

Steven Mossburg August 5, 2010 at 7:32 PM Excellent! Your words fit this style really well. A well deserve win. congrats, Steve

Debbie Guzzi August 5, 2010 at 4:02 PM When I saw this movie during this scene you could have heard a pin drop...the sexual tension in the room was overwhelming...and yet we "saw" nothing.... a marvel of acting, directing & filming & goodness the sound track!

Andrea Dietrich August 5, 2010 at 2:57 PM Deb, A BIG CONGRATS. truly my favorite triolet. STEAMY!!!!

Carrie Richards August 5, 2010 at 8:28 AM Loved this movie then......and still do!!! (And must say, he stole more than a kiss on that speeding subway!!) and.............his mother's glass egg was the least of his problems!! Great pick.....Hip Hooray for you!!! Fun one to remember! :)

Jessica Arteaga August 5, 2010 at 8:05 AM great scene! and congrats on your first place win with this cool poem :D

Linda-Marie Sweetheart August 5, 2010 at 8:03 AM Congrats TEACH on your big first place win for this superb write from a great movie... enjoy your top spot for your top notch write.. perfection.. with luv.. pupil...

Sharon Tideswell July 30, 2010 at 4:23 AM Enjoyed your triolet very much, very visual... and now the subway steams for a different reason ;) ~ Sharon :)

Doris Culverhouse July 27, 2010 at 6:56 AM enjoyed reading your works today! Great write!

Constance La France July 26, 2010 at 7:46 PM You painted a wonderful romantic scene with words ~ well done ~

Dr.Ram Mehta July 26, 2010 at 7:37 PM A wonderful pen picture of the moments, Debi. Good luck in the contest

James Marshall Goff July 26, 2010 at 6:33 PM gorgeous art! Deb! jimbo