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rising to the occasion

Night breaking up for the sun to fall, Its colorwise veil disperse on her snagged back— By morning, she lays her black cup down For she is the will of light. Its colorwise veil disperse on her snagged back, Dark worthy of van Gogh or Kinkade; For she is the will of light— The night becomes daybreak. Dark worthy of van Gogh or Kinkade; By morning, she lays her black cup down; The night becomes daybreak— Night breaking up for the sun to fall.

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Tom Woody

Date: 7/30/2024 4:49:00 PM

I see you are doing these without rhymes or consistent syllable counts. Almost like a free style pantoum. Next time I'll try one like yours Paige

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/11/2024 5:28:00 PM

So interesting! … Its colorwise veil disperse on her snagged back, Dark worthy of van Gogh or Kinkade

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 6/8/2024 6:06:00 PM

Dear Paige, your poetic personification of night and day is outstanding and you have captured the cyclical beauty of light emerging from darkness with lyrical elegance. A brilliant gem. - Blessings, My Friend, Daniel

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 6/8/2024 8:11:00 AM

You mention some great painters. Not easy to write a pantoum. I know! But you did well.

Ink Empress

Date: 6/8/2024 1:55:00 AM

Dear paige, van gogh and his life story really is inspiring and worthy of remembering poetically and more. He is one of my fave artists. People say he went through bipolar disorder and the end of his life was sad, i bet if he was alive and can see poets like you celebrating him through poetry and artistic and moving lines, it would have made him so happy! Love this! A fave this is for me. Sending you light always

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/7/2024 11:47:00 PM

Such a beautiful poem in the Pantoum art form. It flows easily. The change from night to daybreak is surreptitiously shown in the verses.

Triny Xiang

Date: 6/7/2024 7:09:00 PM

I've never seen a coupling of Monet to Thomas Kincade, but now I see. Loved the play of light and night. I'm eager for your next poem to see who will win this game of cups.

Paige Hind
Date: 6/7/2024 7:50:00 PM

Hello, I did some surfing when I got your comment. I love Monet's work, but his life story was not what I wanted to convey here- so I substituted van Gogh. Thanks for your comment. :) Cheers