Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

Riding My Unicorn

I ride my unicorn along a rocky shore
As the full moon glistens on the waves
A beauty in the distance catches my eye
She is basking in the moons reflective glow

As the full moon glistens on the waves
I am completely mesmorized 
She is basking in the moons reflective glow
I am drawn to be so much nearer to her

I am completely mesmorized
Her there naked laying on that rock
I am drawn to be so much nearer to her
As I look I notice her tail

Her there naked laying on that rock
A temptation I can hardly resist
As I look I notice her tail
She beckons me to give her a kiss

A temptation I can hardly resist
I see the moonlight in her eyes
She beckons me to give her a kiss
I leap from the unicorn to be in her arms

I see the moonlight in her eyes
Sometimes beauty isn't what it seems
I leap from my unicorn to be in her arms
Then I watch as she is stabbed through the heart

Sometimes beauty isn't what it seems
I am enchanted by her siren call
Then I watch as she is stabbed through the heart
The unicorn's horn hits it's mark

I was enchanted by her siren call
Now I'm appalled by what I see
The unicorn's horn hit it's mark
A scaled monster lays dead on a rock

Now I'm appalled by what I see
How could I ever have been so blind
A scaled monster lays dead on a rock
Blood trickles from the unicorn's horn

How could I ever have been so blind
A beauty in the distance caught my eye
Blood trickles from the unicorn's horn
I ride my unicorn along a rocky shore


Mythological Animals or bird contest.
June 3rd 2013

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Skat A June 19, 2013 at 1:26 PM nice win. SKAT

Connie Gildersleeve June 19, 2013 at 3:12 AM Richard congratulations on your fine win. Warm Smiles, Connie Richard Lamoureux June 19, 2013 at 6:29 AM Thanks Connie

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl June 19, 2013 at 12:34 AM Congratulations on your winning spot Richard xx Richard Lamoureux June 19, 2013 at 6:30 AM Thanks Mandy

Shadow Hamilton June 18, 2013 at 8:19 PM congrats on your win ty for entering Shadow x smiles Richard Lamoureux June 19, 2013 at 6:30 AM Thanks Shadow

Poet Tacito June 5, 2013 at 10:11 AM Stunning lines. I've met some friends of old where the circumstances were very similar. Sad. This was wonderfully written! Richard Lamoureux June 5, 2013 at 5:29 PM Thanks Drake

Caleah Buil June 4, 2013 at 1:31 PM You never know a person's true colors. Not everything we see is maybe as beautiful as we think! I enjoyed this one! Wish you the best in the contest! :) Richard Lamoureux June 4, 2013 at 2:21 PM Thanks Caleah

Anne-Lise Andresen June 4, 2013 at 6:40 AM - One nice "adventure travel", Richard. - Good luck in the contest! - Have a nice day. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :) Richard Lamoureux June 4, 2013 at 8:53 AM Thanks Anne Lise

Timothy Hicks June 3, 2013 at 11:56 PM Very interesting, Rick. Unicorns and mermaids are often though of very serene and majestic creatures... but in this I see the darker side of them. Temptation can be a "killer" it seems... Richard Lamoureux June 4, 2013 at 8:53 AM Yes it can! Take care Tim.

Colleen Bono June 3, 2013 at 11:27 PM I changed my name to.Still the same poet.Have a great day.Can't wait to see what you post tomorrow.Take care.Colleen Richard Lamoureux June 4, 2013 at 8:54 AM Hi Collen

Debbie Duncan June 3, 2013 at 9:05 PM Awesome Richard ;} going to fav's Richard Lamoureux June 4, 2013 at 8:54 AM Thanks Deb

Nette Onclaud June 3, 2013 at 1:46 PM this makes me sigh...lilting, drifting, smooth and soft... love unicorns, and the form fits to a T!... great job!..:) Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 7:37 PM Thanks Nette, still experimenting with this form.

Dave Timperley June 3, 2013 at 12:24 PM I oft' wonder about the stuff of mythology and living here in Cyprus there is a lot of it about. Your tale of Unicorns & Sirens is great stuff. I shall have to look into trying a pantoum at some date. I have noted it on my to-do list. Great stuff Richard Thank you for sharing. God Bless. Dave. Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 7:38 PM Thanks Dave, nice to see a new face.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl June 3, 2013 at 12:03 PM I am sure this will do well Richard you do it with such skill xx Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 12:08 PM Thanks Mandy

Terry O'Leary June 3, 2013 at 11:26 AM Very nice, Richard! Pantoums are rather complicated to create, but you suceeded flawlessly! Good luck in the contest... Terry (PS thank you for all your kind comments... much appreciated... by the way, though not a mailman, I am a male man...) Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 11:39 AM Thanks for clearing that up *lol* I had sensed a male presence but the poem left me wondering.

Colleen Bono June 3, 2013 at 9:47 AM Awesome.What are your thoughts on the BS going on with PD.People are unbelievable sometimes.What comes around goes around and carma is a b****.Have a great day. Colleen Bono June 3, 2013 at 4:36 PM read PD's blog from last night. Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 11:40 AM I must live in a bubble, I am not aware of anything. I hope you have a great day as well.

John Loving Iii June 3, 2013 at 9:29 AM Pantoum was used perfectly Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 11:41 AM Thanks John

Manel Gunatillake June 3, 2013 at 8:24 AM Beautiful fairy tale. very nice. you are a winner! Thanks for your comment. very encouraging. Hugs/manel Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 8:31 AM Hugs back

Eileen Manassian June 3, 2013 at 7:28 AM This should do well, Richard. It should do well.... Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 8:16 AM I hope so, time will tell. Thanks for the vote of confidence. Hugs Rick.

Elai Cee June 3, 2013 at 6:53 AM big smile on it... love the vast imagination on your poem. happy to see the ending..Elai Richard Lamoureux June 3, 2013 at 7:26 AM Thanks Elai