Nette Onclaud Poet Light Verse

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Rice Field

Rice fields look the same except
for this one; this one who knew me
before i was born… and lying on her
fertile belly, she tosses the mist
of evening’s bamboo for raindrops to
moisten the flesh of gentle cattle.

Through serenades from elders
gathering in a bonfire of twitters
and jousts,a carousel of birds wheels
in a rhapsody, then takes flight along
scented air whisking tiny lanterns
near the plain,while rivers blue twirl
on rustic clay. How beautiful can she be!
I must have twirled with her on a cradle
of blushing petals swirling oh so feathery!

Waking up for some reason, dusted grains
on my eyes ignite this one
spectacle tryst with my rice field
where I have become different... 
my head throbbing in sweet surrender,
perhaps, claiming the very floor
of my navel through her ripened harvest.


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Judged and Finalized 6/18/2016
I Got Zero, Nothing, Nada -1
Contest of Broken Wings
Resubmitted 7/1/2016

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Reason A. Poteet July 5, 2016 at 12:12 PM nette, congratulations on your placement in Broken Wings' contest. Have enjoyed many of your pieces and count this one as one of your best. I have used three of your lines here in a cento which I've written called Embrace the Lines. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/embrace_the_lines_806292 If you have an objection, please let me know.

Alexis Y. July 4, 2016 at 4:18 PM Hi Nette, Congrats on your placement in the contest. It was well deserved: -)Alexis

Connie Marcum Wong June 18, 2016 at 1:23 AM Congratulations Nette. I was hoping this wonderful poem would be chosen for POTD when I faved it. It is simply outstandint! ; )

Fritz Crytzer June 17, 2016 at 8:04 PM Esterotic. I loved the relationships between fertile growth and fertile love. I think, well, I don't think, I feel, this wonderful piece of poetry. Thank you for your words! Fritz Crytzer, Fritz theCat

Andrea Dietrich June 17, 2016 at 7:19 PM very unique. and I see it's POTD. Big congrats to you. So lovely.

Sandra Haight June 17, 2016 at 4:09 PM Very lovely, Nette. Congratulations on your poem being honored as Poem Of The Day. 7 Hugs, Sandra

Edward Micheals June 17, 2016 at 12:57 PM Really enjoyed.

Anne-Lise Andresen June 17, 2016 at 12:01 PM - Congratulations on your p.o.t.d. Nette - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Walter T. Ashe June 17, 2016 at 10:05 AM Nette, you have crystallised a life experience in memory into one that all can now see with your "eyes!" This defines vivid! You have "spilled ink" touchingly with this POTD! Congrats to you! The best to you in this contest! :-)

Connie Marcum Wong June 16, 2016 at 3:40 PM A first place winner for me Nette! This is brilliantly written. It stirs the emotions with breathtaking imagery that comes alive with your carefully chosen words. Stunnng! #7+ ; ) A fave!

Ashley Conte June 16, 2016 at 2:32 PM You have painted vivid scenes line for line which seems to lift the poem off the page for me to experience and enjoy. Unforgettable poem like this field you speak of!

Leon Datu June 16, 2016 at 2:21 PM Extraordinary not just for the nostalgic sway of your words but also for the joyful beauty you have imparted to them. Nothing like a special place to bring out the best in you!

Anne-Lise Andresen June 16, 2016 at 12:40 PM - When I read your words .... look at your photo - Beautiful, but very much work .... all done with curved back and skillful hands ..... and wet feet - Impressive! - A beautiful poem that will give you a great place on the contest list Nette, good luck - hugs // Anne-Lise :)