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Rhymeantic Struggle

Oh that I could break the chime that addles my brain constantly That implanted seed of rhyme that worms in my subconscious That causes me to live and dream in my restrictive literary world Courted by couplets with ballad intoning in the near back ground I hear the thoughts of betters that advise me to divorce my love Perhaps I will beg my vowels and consonants to free me for a time To let my mind flutter like red admirals on blossom filled buddleia With the promise that I will return with gifts from afar to share That I will gather my love in sweet nectar scented embraces To assure them that I will always return to childhood friends Freedom freely given will strengthen our knowledge and ability Will let be seen that which hitherto was the domain of others

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 2/10/2012 6:46:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved feature Eamon. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/6/2012 11:18:00 PM
Congratulations on having your poem featured on Poetry Soup this week.................S.Ronthorpe
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Date: 1/5/2011 2:29:00 PM
I started writing poetry in rhyme but realised it restricted me hugely so I moved to haiku and then free verse. There are so many different ways of writing thank God. This was wonderful Eamon, loved it.
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Date: 11/10/2010 4:05:00 PM
How WELL I know this feeling, Eamon. I think many of us are stuck in this frame of mind. I say, "down with too much freedom!" Restriction in writing rules!
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Date: 11/10/2010 4:05:00 PM
And this was a good non-rhyming poem!
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Date: 11/10/2010 9:52:00 AM
Wow, I can really relate to your message, Eamon. Rhyme takes hold of my writing and I can't seem to do anything without it. But you did succeed in this excellent free verse form! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 11/10/2010 7:45:00 AM
If life will always be like a rhyme, agreeing always on its terminal sounds, then there will be no conflict on this world. I enjoyed reading this poem, Eamon. Thanks for leaving a message to my poem. (^_^) Noel.
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Date: 11/10/2010 7:13:00 AM
I love this poem with hints of sweetness and realities. .very creative and well done in Linda's contest!you deserved it!
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Date: 11/9/2010 11:30:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your well written poetry today Eamon. Thank you for sharing it. Love, Carol
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Date: 11/9/2010 6:19:00 AM
Nice analogies you have presented in this write, vowels and consonants to free me for a time.....Eamon
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Date: 11/9/2010 6:00:00 AM
another beautiful write,Eamon.different theme and treatment .great.
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