Rewrite

It's imperative to alter the narrative, so get out a round of ream. There's a knot in the plot, a lost theme with out a seam.. You pause and you pivot. The script leaves you livid, falling short of your dream. Stopped, stalled between acts, little time to retrack, as your pen is running out of steam.

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Aparajita Bhattacharjee

Date: 3/20/2024 9:28:00 AM

The alliteration is striking. Makes your poem an interesting read.

Christina Bowring

Date: 3/19/2024 12:52:00 AM

Such a great poem to read dear Nancy and one that many can relate to. Reading it out aloud highlights the perfect flow and rhyme. You have captured the frustration of writing so well here when things aren’t going to plan and your muse has other ideas and goes off in another direction. I feel abandoned very often and can sit looking at even a single word for a very long time as I try to get out of a poetic hole that I’ve dug myself into. I love, ‘ there’s a knot in the plot’ ‘ stopped, stalled

Nancy Kaufman
Date: 3/19/2024 4:26:00 AM

Hi Christina, Thank you so much for such a lengthy critique of my poem and I also think it's quite relatable for fellow writers as well as those of us who are rewriting our lives. Blessings to you. I truly appreciate your visit here.

Christina Bowring
Date: 3/19/2024 12:54:00 AM

between acts’ - that’s me! Loved reading this so relatable poem and it reminds us all that we are not alone in our creative struggles at times. Thank you for sharing. Hugs to you for a wonderful day xx

Michael Tor

Date: 3/18/2024 6:53:00 PM

been there done that. Always searching for that perfect write. Well written Nancy you found it in this one. A favorite for me cause I know exactly what you mean...

Nancy Kaufman
Date: 3/19/2024 4:28:00 AM

Wow Michael, I am pleased that you had time for a visit here. Thanks for coming and faving this one. It makes me very happy. Many blessings to you!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 3/18/2024 4:57:00 PM

how captivating, Nancy. You've captured the struggles and conflict of not only physically rewriting something but also rewriting one's life. Impressive and well done, Nancy. Have a splendid evening, Sara

Nancy Kaufman
Date: 3/19/2024 4:29:00 AM

Dear Poetess Sara, You are quite perceptive. It seems like you know me too well already. LOL Blessings and thanks for taking the time to comment..

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/18/2024 7:50:00 AM

Dear Nancy, You beautifully captured the struggle of rewriting life's narrative when it veers off course. The imagery of a knot in the plot and a lost theme touches anyone who has felt stuck in their own story. I liked how your words show pausing, pivoting, and finding the courage to rewrite our paths toward our dreams. Nancy, this is an insightful reflection on the power of perseverance and adaptation. - Blessings, Daniel

Nancy Kaufman
Date: 3/19/2024 4:33:00 AM

Hi Daniel, You and Sara saw a much deeper level here. It's never easy to rethink what's left of one's life is it? I'm gearing up for perhaps one more relocation but not sure where or when.. Blessings to you and thanks for your detailed critique. Please don't start charging me LOL

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/18/2024 6:07:00 AM

Sometimes the muse doesn't cooperate. Rewrite is the only way to get where we want to be. Your poem made it, Nancy.

Nancy Kaufman
Date: 3/19/2024 4:30:00 AM

Dear Vijay, I need to spend more time before posting my musings. Too many should be tossed these days. Thanks for your comments and have a blessed day..