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Repentance

I lie awake
while he snores to the saints
                    at four a.m.
maybe I need to repent
      some kind of sin

            — tanka



            by Berteena
        Wild Orchid Haiku
       05 February, 2019
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Gibbs Knd Kawinga

February 16, 2019 at 4:44 PM

'riddle worth decrypting' ; i can tell there's a deep sense of feeling you are trying to bring to real-time reasoning ...

Berteena Harmony Of The Soul

February 25, 2019 at 7:47 PM

I’m tend to write most of my poetry in riddles. I’m glad you interpreted that within my haiku too. You are so kind. ;)

Mike Grant

February 13, 2019 at 11:26 PM

As I lie next to my loved ones as they fall asleep before I do and within a few minutes they let out a faint snore. I embrace the sound because the silence scares me I'm afraid something is wrong. As they snore I know there alive and well and it brings me peace knowing that they are healthy! That's just me other people might think I'm weird Wich is true I am a little paranoid/ weird! I really enjoyed your poem

Berteena Harmony Of The Soul

February 14, 2019 at 10:44 PM

I get that. Nothing like hearing the sound of your own children snore and know that they feel safe and resting well. Sometimes I hear my dog snoring really loud. After several years of being w/someone you love, it’s easy to covet their rest while you lie there next to them in the midst of insomnia. I get a little jealous. He does too when it happens to him. It’s like we take turns in our weeks of insomnia. Oddly enough, I miss hearing my Daddy snoring when I was a child. I wish he was still alive to keep us all awake. Silly the things you miss about people. Sometimes sleeplessness feels like a punishment. No rest. Thank you for your kindness. ;)

John Gondolf

February 5, 2019 at 11:19 AM

This snoring at 4 am seems to be a repeating theme. Maybe you should get some earplugs. All the best. John

Berteena Harmony Of The Soul

February 5, 2019 at 11:37 AM

I don’t wrestle with the flesh. I would rather the waves and to feel less alone in the dark during those hours. ijs ;)

Vijay Pandit

February 5, 2019 at 10:27 AM

Well expressed Berteena..many can relate to your theme.

Berteena Harmony Of The Soul

February 5, 2019 at 10:32 AM

Thank you! It’s suggestive for interpretation.

Caren Krutsinger

February 5, 2019 at 10:20 AM

Someone is trying to get your attention at 4 a.m. All you have to do is ask "who?" the next time. You will automatically know, and you will be right. Your soul always knows. It is the curse of the sensitives.

Berteena Harmony Of The Soul

February 5, 2019 at 10:28 AM

I see you, Ms. Caren. You get it. I understand what you’re saying. Joy comes in the morning, when we are ready to receive. :)

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