James Inman Poet Rhyme

Relaxing Rain

Candy corn rays of sunlight melt through the glass,
where frosty ice-coated rills amass.
Finger placed against the pane
leaves a misty stain,
when cold day's
rain
gently plays
through emotion's strain,
but glad as my feelings drain.
I pour myself a glass of wine as
candy corn rays of sunlight melt through the glass.



10/06/15

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Skat A October 21, 2015 at 9:25 PM James, Wonderful win.................. SKAT James Inman October 21, 2015 at 10:52 PM Thank you SKAT

Jan Allison October 17, 2015 at 9:09 PM Dropping back with my congrats James:-) hugs jan xx James Inman October 17, 2015 at 10:30 PM Jan, Thank you.

Andrea Dietrich October 17, 2015 at 8:52 PM ralph this is simply beautiful. Ahhhhh!! Congratulations on your win. James Inman October 17, 2015 at 10:29 PM Thanks Andrea, challenging contest. Thanks for hosting it.

Constance La France October 7, 2015 at 10:05 AM James so beautiful 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, romantic ... James Inman October 7, 2015 at 10:28 AM Thank you BW

Jan Allison October 7, 2015 at 7:29 AM James this is delightful with wonderful imagery - it is a very challenging form !!!!- the first one I wrote took me 3 hours my one for this contest took considerably less - good luck:-) James Inman October 7, 2015 at 8:29 AM I agree Jan. My original poem was supposed to be about a lazy day in bed but my problems with matching the rhyme and syllable count completely reformed it. Thanks for the nice comment, and luck to you.

CayCay Godwin October 7, 2015 at 12:00 AM Very well done, I like how you described the colors of sunlight. Good luck in the contest, James ... CayCay CayCay Godwin October 7, 2015 at 4:23 AM That's sweet, but you are probably being overly critical of your own work. I did enjoy all the imagery very much. You poetically captured a moment ... CayCay James Inman October 7, 2015 at 3:38 AM Thanks CayCay, after rereading it now, it doesn't flow very well. I prefer yours.