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One day when I was sitting by a bubbling brook a nostalgic scene of my childhood time flashed in the visage of my mind. I saw the sparkling stream that bedecked our house with an ornate garland, glided with glistening liquid pearls of elegance, flowed with the flamboyant facade of silvery splendor. On its rippling water passing me by, I sailed paper boats tinged with the rainbow colors. These glided on the current’s tortuous trail, and on these, my mariner mind sailed slow, unbound in stalled time, to a distant dreamland.

The boats soon disappeared in the ebb of time, and I kept gazing at the brook, flowing with timeless zeal, beyond which the dusk was silently descending with the sun setting fast for me in the twilight hour. That was when I saw the night fall with sadness in the shortest time.

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Suzette Richards Date: 8/6/2023 1:31:00 AM Story telling: ‘One day when …’ This was all that detracted from this excellent write. The vignette is immediate. Thank you for entering my contest, Relativity/Time – congratulations on your placement Subimal. Login to Reply Suzette Richards Date: 8/7/2023 3:39:00 AM It is the standard introduction to story telling, similar to "Once upon a time.". A vignette is a snapshot and not a story and has no backstory. If you would like to explore this further, there is a link that I have posted afterwards on the contest page (accessed via the Contest Results page and scroll down). If the content did not appeal to me, I would merely have N/A the piece. Subimal Sinha-Roy Date: 8/6/2023 10:49:00 PM Thank you so much, Suzette for the placement. I thought 'One day when..' is immediate in the past.