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For the Refining consciousness contest by Unseeking Seeker.

 

 

Refining Consciousness

Line of enquiry:
Instrumentalising mind, I rested thought
employing it only when needed
shifting to heart, I became self-taught
gentling touch, voice of conscience heeded.

Intellect and intuition are like a sword and shield.
One cuts through darkness to bring clarity,
the other is an internal compass protecting the lost.
Both are formed polished, vigorous and gallant,
but through the struggles of each battle,
become ineffective when not revived.

My mind plays like a piano
and I am its pianist.
When I sit upon the cliffs of doubt,
it seems to be sleepwalking into a
chaotic jungle of consciousness,
where the symphony ignores the song sheet.
I don't want my words to be forgotten.
There is no reality in this reverie,
so the soul yearns to be free,
like a seagull soaring above stormy seas,
towards a sapphire and ivory skyline.

Sometimes skies can resemble fire, 
where flames appear too strong,
so my internal wings seek refuge.
To heal from the noise, I lose myself 
in the stillness of solitude.
In my loneliness, ego screams,
so I escape from this echo chamber,
by starving it from unworthy self praise

but if I do not love myself,
who will love me?

When dwelling upon the mountain of overthinking,
my spirit is unable to adapt to the flutes of fate,
but I ignore the provocation of poison.
I listen to the musicality of my heart,
releasing the strings of attachment.
I burn myself to light up the blackness,
composing lyrics from adversity's lessons.

I am a metaphor for a star,
touching the divine horizons,
sparkling, but still learning from the
'see saw' emotions of my heart and mind.

We are all carpenters in life,
with different tools to master our minds,
trying to control the outlook of our emotions.
As rivers of wisdom integrate smoother,
when we build bridges of compassion over them.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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George Avatar
February 1, 2025 at 3:22 PM
The interplay between intellect and intuition as a "sword and shield" is a powerful opening, setting the tone for the exploration of the inner self. The imagery of the "piano" mind and the "seagull soaring above stormy seas" vividly captures the struggles of navigating doubt and chaos, balanced with a yearning for freedom and clarity. "We are all carpenters in life, with different tools to master our minds, trying to control the outlook of our emotions." A profound statement that shows depth.
Goldsmith Avatar
August 19, 2024 at 12:13 PM
What a powerful write. Love your line, "but if I do not love myself, who will love me?." So Very True... "Good Luck" Have a wonderful/blessed day.......................
Delaney Avatar
August 19, 2024 at 7:49 AM
I love your poetic lines on refining consciousness. Like a journey across the landscape of our minds. Your last two lines are a goal many would wish for. Rivers of wisdom with bridges of compassion. I love that. SuZ
Delaney Avatar
August 19, 2024 at 7:48 AM
I love your poetic lines on refining consciousness. Like a journey across the landscape of our minds. Your last two lines are a goal many would wish for. Rivers of wisdom with bridges of compassion. I love that. SuZ
Buhagiar Avatar
August 16, 2024 at 1:31 AM
We all have our highs and lows (too many lows lately), but music and good poetry do console us—brilliant exposition of life's emotions.
George Avatar
August 15, 2024 at 8:34 PM
Circumstances in life may not be always conducive to our mental well being. Sometimes we have to drink from the cup of poison. Adversities in life, we have ever to confront. Yet we have the capacity to tide over all hardships. Each one may have his own methods. You find relief in poetry and music. "I listen to the musicality of my heart, releasing the strings of attachment. I burn myself to light up the blackness, composing lyrics from adversity's lessons." . In your poems you find delight and also through them give delight to others. Fantastic composition!
DiMino Avatar
August 15, 2024 at 2:37 PM
"I listen to the musicality of my heart, releasing the strings of attachment. I burn myself to light up the blackness, composing lyrics from adversity's lessons." -- great poetry my friend -- "rivers of wisdom integrate smoother, when we build bridges of compassion over them." Lessons well learned. Excellent read!
Brotherton Avatar
August 14, 2024 at 6:24 PM
Fantastic poem, Silent One. The last verse is so wonderful. Beautifully written, my friend. Have a great evening.
De Beaulieu Avatar
August 14, 2024 at 3:01 PM
Hello silent One, i like the line "If I do not love myself, who will ;love me? I also like the last 3 verses. It will be my fav. My friend. Enjoy your evening. /Darlene/
Empress Avatar
August 14, 2024 at 2:00 PM
Dear silent one! What an excellent poem this is woven with exquisite metaphors and imagery, on how sometimes mind wanders through chaotic jungles of consciousness, sleep walking, amidst the skies that resemble fire and all that which drags us down and burn us out in this world which can be bittersweet. However we rise beyond darkness and compose lyrics and find the musicality of heart to seek serenity! Youv written on the line of enquiry so very well! And i cant help but be in awe of your way of expressing! Absolutely love the sumptuous nature of your word weaving! Impeccable write, with seamless alliterations too! Love it! Too many lines in this stood out for me! Best wishes for the contest!
Hind Avatar
August 14, 2024 at 1:35 PM
Very inspiring, "As rivers of wisdom integrate smoother, when we build bridges of compassion over them" love that
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