Redwoods

the tall redwood trees burnt, carved, hollowed for shelter still green & standing tall like a redwood tree I feel tormented and saddened ignoring hardships standing here for centuries sharing calm & serenity wish I could be like a redwood grove aged with wisdom I feel like a giant overshadowing my misfortunes sharing my thoughts and giving peace and happiness to all in world (A combination of haiku, tanka and sijo)

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/28/2023 1:51:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Redwoods" write/great ending. "Happy New Year 2024" .................

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/27/2023 10:19:00 AM

Well done, Jan

Valsa George

Date: 12/26/2023 9:56:00 PM

A noble desire.... ! So insightful too... Wishing to give joy for others is a humane thought. b/w Please note that tanka is a poem of five lines.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 4:56:00 PM

A creative masterpiece, Jay. All three forms were rewarding to read. The imagery and the wisdom passed on to us was inspirational. This one goes on my FAV list, my friend.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 4:09:00 PM

I enjoyed your three poem combination. I too wish I cold be like a redwood grove aged with wisdom. Your poem was insightful and evocative. Well done, Jay. Have a great evening, Sara