Redwoods

the tall redwood trees
burnt, carved, hollowed for shelter
still green & standing tall 

like a redwood tree
I feel tormented and saddened
ignoring hardships
standing here for centuries
sharing calm & serenity

wish I could be like a redwood grove aged with wisdom 
I feel like a giant overshadowing my misfortunes
sharing my thoughts and giving peace and happiness to all in world

(A combination of haiku,  tanka and sijo)

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/28/2023 1:51:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Redwoods" write/great ending. "Happy New Year 2024" .................

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/27/2023 10:19:00 AM

Well done, Jan

Valsa George

Date: 12/26/2023 9:56:00 PM

A noble desire.... ! So insightful too... Wishing to give joy for others is a humane thought. b/w Please note that tanka is a poem of five lines.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/26/2023 4:56:00 PM

A creative masterpiece, Jay. All three forms were rewarding to read. The imagery and the wisdom passed on to us was inspirational. This one goes on my FAV list, my friend.