Redemption Knight- For Medaeval Contest

He rode the wind on mighty steed
He drove it fast to gain more speed
To win maiden in noble deed
As he galloped in the night…

He found his damsel in distress
With dragon claws clutching her dress
Disheveled hair and heart astress
As he galloped within sight…

One swift leap and he came aground
His rebel yell a mighty sound
Courage to fight in her he found
As he strode into her plight…

She gazed at eyes of azure blue
A depth of love she never knew
For handsome knight so brave and true
As she held on with her might…

He sunk he sword in to the hilt
Dragon heart blood to ground was spilt
Caught the damsel about to wilt 
As his valor set things right…

In his strong arms she found her place
She gazed into his angel face
Between their bodies not a space
As the night was tinged with light…

He bowed his head to plant a kiss
A song of love, no dragon hiss
Her world now filled with utter bliss
As to heaven they took flight….

For Isaiah Zerbest Medaeval contest
August 3, 2013
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Lamoureux Avatar
April 17, 2019 at 10:06 AM
So enjoyable to read again. Hugs Rick.
Posey Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:31 PM
Well done, Ellen. Congratulations on a well deserved win.... Jake
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:45 PM
Jake, thanks for the post. You haven't been around for a bit. Hope all is well.
Morgan Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 3:04 AM
Congrats on yr win. Morgan
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:45 PM
Morgan, thanks for taking the time to come back here and congratulate me. I appreciate it! :)
A  Avatar
August 24, 2013 at 7:51 PM
Awesome winning poem....SKAT
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:46 PM
Thanks, Skat. I appreciate the post!
Hamilton Avatar
August 23, 2013 at 4:19 PM
Eileen I am enchanted by your tale congrats on win Shadow x smile
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:46 PM
Enchanted...sweet! Thanks for that, Shadow.
Lamoureux Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 12:47 PM
Enjoyed reading again, congratulations, a well deserved win Eileen!
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:47 PM
Thanks, Richard. Kind of you to come by and post this.
Eastman Avatar
August 22, 2013 at 10:57 AM
BRAVO! Each stanza was written sooo very well... and the story was marvelous..Your wording was exquisite... Congrats on such a great poem and win...
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:48 PM
What a lovely, sweet, and lovely post, Carol! So glad that you enjoyed my poem and that you passed by! Hugs!
Richards Avatar
August 21, 2013 at 6:48 PM
I am swooning with old maiden heart palpations after reading this one!! So fun to read.....and pleased to share placement with you !!! Congratulations!
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:49 PM
An honor, indeed, to share the spot with you, Carrie. Thanks for the lovely visit. we all need a fairy tale now and again, don't we?
Zerbst Avatar
August 21, 2013 at 5:57 PM
Awesome rhymes! And so very ideal! I am struck by the attention to detail in this piece as well. The dragon claws, the grand emotions, the "utter bliss"!
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:50 PM
Isaiah, I'm so grateful for the place you gave my poem in your contest. Thanks every so much for this kind post. I'm grateful!
Morgan Avatar
August 11, 2013 at 7:42 PM
All the best sister, this has all the formula, for a winner! Need i say more. . . ?
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:52 PM
Thank you for that, Danesh....Yes, more please!
Duncan Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 9:46 AM
love it ,,,, good luck in contest ;}
Manassian Avatar
August 25, 2013 at 2:44 PM
Late with this, but thanks for the wishes.... They worked! :)
Anglesey Avatar
August 6, 2013 at 9:07 PM
You are an exceptional talent..your work is absolutely stunning...I love it...going in my faves:)
Manassian Avatar
August 9, 2013 at 3:36 AM
Stunning? Wow...What an invigorating adjective for me, Karen...i'm flying with your words of praise. Thank you!
Seal Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 4:47 AM
Seems I've missed the debate over the last two stanzas so I can't comment on that. This though, tells the story well and flows freely. A good form for this tale. Good luck in the contest. Take care, Richard
Manassian Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 8:05 AM
You know what they say about the cat being away.... ;) I"m glad you like the flow of the poem, Mr Seal....I'm not even sure if this form has a name, so I just put it in the rhyme category. I need the luck...I need it...Keep rooting for me!
Horsman Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 12:17 AM
love the passion,, i would never change a poem as good as this,, just write another similar then we can have two beautiful poems to cast one's eye upon..this is lovely///
Manassian Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 3:49 AM
Harry!!!!! Thanks ever so much for the post. Always great to hear from you. :) I'm smiling in real life too! :)
J.T. Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 10:51 AM
Hmm... edit the beginning part of line 17 and 18 then you decide on the last two stanzas.
Manassian Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 11:10 PM
I had a look, PJ...I'm not sure how? Care to give me some suggestions? Thanks!
Tacito Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 7:51 AM
This was coated in more of Eileen's fiery & passionate pen. I have this strong urge now to see Robin Hood: Men in Tights, the only good Robin Hood movie that matters. =D A very endearing end in this piece.
Manassian Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 11:11 PM
Oh Drake....I read the story of Robin Hood. No movie can do it justice, I'm sure...especially not Men in Tights! HA HA HA HA HA! Anyway...the part where he dies in Little John's arms after shooting the arrow had me sobbing for hours. My Mama thought I was losing it. Thank you for fiery and passionate...if I lose those qualities...I might as well stop writing. HUGS!
Mohammed Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 2:49 AM
Your rhyming schematics was beautifully put together Eileen.This was well done.I love it.
Manassian Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 11:21 PM
WOW! Thank you so much for this endearing post, Mustapha. I'm so pleased! :)
Lamoureux Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 2:47 PM
When you write those stanzas seperatly they are quite beautiful, They feel like a poem that can stand on their own. Perhaps it is the change in rhyme that threw me off.
Manassian Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 11:09 PM
Well, I certainly do NOT want to throw you off, Richard. You were right...This way I got two poems out of one! Good deal. Always be on hand to guide me! Hugs!
Lamoureux Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 1:46 PM
This is good, not exactly sure what changed but this feels better. Well done Eileen.
Manassian Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 1:52 PM
He dressed her in virgin white To bedchamber did invite Candles set to glowing light For her passion to ignite As she gave in to her knight He took her to wondrous height The night shimmered with delight Heaven burst upon her sight I deleted these two stanzas in the end....
Manassian Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 1:48 PM
Oh Richard....I took out those last two stanzas...those that I had in mono rhyme.......
Onclaud Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 1:41 PM
great wordsmith you are, eileen... is there a sequeal to this one... romance and valor at theor best!..:) huggs
Manassian Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 1:42 PM
Hi Nette...I did have two more stanzas to it, but....I deleted them. Glad you liked this! Hugs!
Andresen Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 12:31 PM
... as a romantic adventure story Eileen, I love it! - Wish you and your family a beautiful weekend.- Luck in contest !!!! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Manassian Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 1:43 PM
Anne Lise....thanks you so much for your visit and sweet words! Hugs!
Lamoureux Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 12:21 PM
A very romantic piece in the tradition of great fairy tales. I would rework the very last stanza, not sure why but it does not flow for me. I love the rest of the piece.
Manassian Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 12:24 PM
Richard....shall I just delete the last two stanzas? Do they detract???? I don't know how to fix the last stanza. I liked the play on Knight and night, but if it doesn't flow....it's got to go! ;) HUGS
Manassian Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 11:03 AM
Opinions please: Do you think I should leave out the last two stanzas as I have changed the rhyme pattern to give it a more lyric type of quality at the end....Please...I'm open to suggestions. Do you think the last line should be...As to heaven they took flight?
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