Redeemed

She finds herself -in dreams - 
dwelling in a cozy place where nothing is elusive,
and in these reveries,
she finds him there with her. . .a different man. 
He isn't surreptitious, so not beset by doubt, 
she's not compelled to query him. 
He opens up to her, 
and she is loved.

He finds himself - in dreams -
living happy moments free to be himself, 
and in these reveries, 
often she appears. . . but unobtrusively, 
without her rain of questions pounding him. 
Instead, she smiles acceptance, 
inviting him to show himself to her, 
and he is loved.

And in between the waking past 
and incubus of their reality, 
they dream in peace. . . together 
and redeemed.


For the Free Verse Contest
of Catie Lindsey
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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February 25, 2012 at 7:50 AM
Hmmmm Sounds like two people who still love each other but somewhere along the line something got messed up. Great job here. God Bless, JB
Song Avatar
February 22, 2012 at 1:40 PM
See, you do rock at FREE VERSE!!!! Told ya! ha ha. I love this one! Keep free-versin', gal! Love, Gwendolen Hey,..will you scrutinize my cinqku? It's my 2nd one.
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February 21, 2012 at 11:17 PM
ANDREA, THIS IS A SWEET WIN..ALWAYS..PD
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February 21, 2012 at 3:04 PM
Andrea, This is a beautiful poem, I really enjoyed reading it. Congrats on placing on Catie's winners' list...........S.Ronthorpe
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February 21, 2012 at 11:55 AM
If only it were always this way. Anyway, beautiful poem you have here =).
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February 21, 2012 at 10:28 AM
congrats Andrea on a terrific third place win for this outstanding and creative masterpiece of poetic art luv..
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February 21, 2012 at 9:59 AM
Congratulations on your placement in ~Catie's~ "Free Verse" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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February 21, 2012 at 9:12 AM
ahhhhhhhh reminded me of a fav song Pina Colata? Congrad's dear Andie! Lovely win Light & love
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February 20, 2012 at 3:48 PM
ah this is romantic thoughts within the dream realm. A jewel of a write. love phyl
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February 18, 2012 at 3:01 PM
Got to score high with this Andrea,, soulful and intense......!
Sweetheart Avatar
February 17, 2012 at 8:15 PM
wonderful words for this challening contest by Catie.. good luck Andrea.. the repeating lines are a strong fav of mine.. adds flavor to the thoughts integrated in piece luv.. another winning work of art..
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February 17, 2012 at 6:08 PM
Reads like a winner to me..What a dream for both of them to have..Wanting the other person to be someone they are not..Sad that only God and the other person can change them..Good luck in Catie's contest.. Thanks for stopping by, reading, and commenitng on my work..No, I did not write Willow Skeletal for a contest just for myself..Sara
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February 17, 2012 at 2:19 PM
Lovely Andrea, he dreams and so does she; hopefully they all come true. Wish you the best in the contest! :)
Horne Avatar
February 17, 2012 at 2:09 PM
Awesome write, my friend. A sure winner
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February 17, 2012 at 11:26 AM
Redeemed indeed..a very lovely and romantic story poem,I enjoyed reading it.God bless you,Hugs!Vienna
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February 17, 2012 at 10:56 AM
wow Andrea, as i read this, i see you as the woman here, and hubby as your man, hope i'm not wrong. so profound. harry
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February 17, 2012 at 9:45 AM
A winner for sure Andrea.Last stanza is great.To see each others dream is a wonerful theme for your poem. Anne
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February 17, 2012 at 8:43 AM
Sweet dream - like poem! Love & Peace Matthew Anish
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February 17, 2012 at 6:19 AM
I love the separation of each persons thoughts and feelings, this really is a very nice piece, good in sight.
Sivey Avatar
February 17, 2012 at 5:55 AM
I loved this lovely verse Andrea! I really enjoyed how you separated the man and the woman parts, very ingenious! Great Work!!
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February 17, 2012 at 12:28 AM
Very nice free verse poem by you Andrea.Best wishes for the contest.
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February 17, 2012 at 12:26 AM
What a fascinating metaphor! The last verse is splendid. An awesome read. ~ Chuck
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February 17, 2012 at 12:22 AM
how are you today... I must say Andrea, i like your free verse style...good luck in the contest... always..pd
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