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Red Sun

sunrise inflames the dawn sky,
 as if it is on fire 
 clouds curl a blush cream, gives
 an unearthly sight


For Russell Sivey's contest, "Red Sun"

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Andrea Dietrich

July 24, 2013 at 12:12 AM

Hope it won. I just saw the contest was judged and I was not on the list. But I bet this beauty made it on!

Connie Gildersleeve

July 25, 2013 at 6:18 PM

Andrea , no I don't think it placed for a win, but thank you for thinking that it might have. Much appreciated. Warm Smiles, Connie

James Marshall Goff

June 29, 2013 at 6:12 AM

Great visual! Connie! Thanks! Jimbo

Connie Gildersleeve

June 29, 2013 at 6:18 PM

Jimbo thank you for the kind comment. Much appreciated. Warm Smiles, Connie

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2013 at 8:04 PM

Have a look at the form. 7/7/7/5. Your content is good and with a bit of rearranging I am sure you could make it work. If you click on dodoitsu up above "about this poem" it offers an excellent example of the form. If I can be of help soup mail me. Thanks for you visit today and thoughtful comment.

Connie Gildersleeve

June 29, 2013 at 4:21 AM

Richard thank you for the heads up. I believe the syllable count is correct now. Much appreciated. Warm Smiles, Connie

Poet Destroyer A

June 28, 2013 at 7:37 PM

ps......... a very lovely view. love the sweet look out tan, in your imagery... excellent... LINDA

Connie Gildersleeve

June 29, 2013 at 6:19 PM

Thank you Lind for your kind comment. It means a lot. Warm Smiles, Connie

Poet Destroyer A

June 28, 2013 at 7:34 PM

Hello Connie, first I want to thank you for helping support the new poets when I had a contest especially for them.. :-) :-)... that was very nice of you. Hardly any one helped greet the winners. That showed me that you have a very tender heart... thank you many hugs... LINDA

Connie Gildersleeve

June 29, 2013 at 6:25 PM

I remember what it's like to be a newbie, and wanted to shout out a 'hallo to them. Thanks for your lovely and kind heart. I hope you're having a lovely weekend. Warm Smiles, Connie