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Red Ball - Haiku

Red Ball – Haiku Giant object, round Red, drifts on the lake closer Reach ball, touch, slip, drown

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Date: 10/24/2014 2:20:00 PM
Well thats not very happy. how tempting to reach for that red ball, this could be a metaphor for something else...anyway you meant it, it hold lots of meaning.
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Earl Schumacker
Date: 10/24/2014 2:50:00 PM
Hi Casarah, Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. All actions have consequences. With haiku you try to tell a big story with a few words. Who wouldn't be temped by a big red ball floating on the water?....You just have to watch your step. (The poor person never had swimming lessons.) Have a great week end. Take care. Earl
Date: 10/24/2014 2:10:00 PM
- Well done,Earl ! - Happy weekend! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Earl Schumacker
Date: 10/24/2014 2:58:00 PM
Hi Anne Lise. I'm glad you liked it. The lure of a big red ball and no swimming lessons is a recipe for disaster. Thank you for commenting. Have a great week end yourself. Take care. Earl