Recital

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7/2/2024

First Place (shared) / "Same Poem, Different Form Poetry Contest" sponsored by Crystol Woods.

Recital / free verse / Pride

Expectation rushes in
As her silent walk begins
All eyes staring
Watching for a hint of emotion
But none revealed
As she takes her place among the muses

No one breathes as her studious eyes
Examine the two-dimensional codes
Then silence breaks
As both hands spring into fantastical dance
On an ever changing ivory and ebony stage

Mellifluous tones, conspicuously full and rich,
Transport all on an uplifting emotional journey
Ears, minds, hearts and lungs
Feasting on delicious pabulum of spirit

Soon tortuous movements diminish
The fantastical dance declines
With final notes
Striking harmonious chords
Deep into our psyche
Our ethereal journey ends
And we gently land where we began

She pauses, then rises
To a cacophony of applause
All eyes staring
Watching for a hint of emotion as she exits
But none revealed
Save a quick glance & brief smile
Acknowledging her proud parent's pounding hearts
Misting eyes and beaming faces


Recital / tanka / Pride

smooth operator
flawless rhapsody in blue
climax conclusion
cacophony of applause
with proud parents’ pounding hearts

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Crystol Woods

Date: 7/5/2024 7:21:00 AM

Yessss!!!! This!!! Congratulations Mark, for 1st place win! I adore this poem. I was taken to this recital and sitting in the audience, I felt and saw and heard every breathless moment. Not only a touching poem but so well written, I found myself holding my breath until finally...applause! And yes, I too clapped! Awesome tanka as well... challenging form especially when changing from a free verse! A+++! Xo

Crystol Woods
Date: 7/5/2024 3:58:00 PM

You're welcome Mark... you earned it! <3

Mark Toney
Date: 7/5/2024 7:46:00 AM

Crystol, I really appreciate your gracious and enthusiastic comments. You’ve made my day! Our friends’ daughter was going to give her first piano recital and we were invited. Our being invited to the recital was a spur of the moment thing, but experiencing it with her parents is now a cherished memory. Thank you for sponsoring this brilliant contest!