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Receptive

In the songbird's throat
            a palette of colours
            startling flair
            in the white lace of morning sun
            tiny fierceness
            that shears the forest with its bravado
            deliriously unselfish
            unbroken vocal spear
For a hiker, in statue like calm
           closing cluttered thoughts
           discarding tidy self musings
           his receptive ear to the rosy pulse of song
           to recall his beau with perfect pitch
           displacing willed isolation

Chorus of vanity from a winged creature
           that skips through a wounded forest
           to wash away a world stained
In notes pure, like ripples of water on a hiker's brow.







Poem revised: January 27th,  2021

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020




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Date: 1/28/2021 1:35:00 PM
Really nice marriage of images and metaphor Brian. Congratulations on your win!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 1/28/2021 3:19:00 PM
Hello Sam, I appreciate your thoughtful note. I did re write the poem to expand on the hiker's internal self. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 11/29/2020 10:58:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the Juxtaposition contest, Brian :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 12/17/2020 6:50:00 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise. Your kind comments brighten the day. Cheers Brian
Date: 11/25/2020 10:24:00 AM
Hi Brian, Congratulations on your win. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/25/2020 3:31:00 PM
Thank you for reading my poem, Alexis. Kind of you to leave me a positive note. All the best. Sincerely Brian
Date: 11/25/2020 7:22:00 AM
Nice choice of wording and take on the contest.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/25/2020 7:32:00 AM
Wonderful idea for a poetry contest - juxtaposition. A solitary hiker uplifted by the lone purity of a songbird's call seemed to fit your requirements. Best wishes always, Brian

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