Receptive

In the songbird's throat
            a palette of colours
            startling flair
            in the white lace of morning sun
            tiny fierceness
            that shears the forest with its bravado
            deliriously unselfish
            unbroken vocal spear
For a hiker, in statue like calm
           closing cluttered thoughts
           discarding tidy self musings
           his receptive ear to the rosy pulse of song
           to recall his beau with perfect pitch
           displacing willed isolation

Chorus of vanity from a winged creature
           that skips through a wounded forest
           to wash away a world stained
In notes pure, like ripples of water on a hiker's brow.







Poem revised: January 27th,  2021
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Kauffman Avatar
January 28, 2021 at 1:35 PM
Really nice marriage of images and metaphor Brian. Congratulations on your win!
Sambourne Avatar
January 28, 2021 at 3:19 PM
Hello Sam, I appreciate your thoughtful note. I did re write the poem to expand on the hiker's internal self. Best wishes, Brian
Andresen Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 10:58 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the Juxtaposition contest, Brian :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Sambourne Avatar
December 17, 2020 at 6:50 AM
Thank you Anne-Lise. Your kind comments brighten the day. Cheers Brian
Y. Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 10:24 AM
Hi Brian, Congratulations on your win. Have a wonderful day:-) Alexis
Sambourne Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 3:31 PM
Thank you for reading my poem, Alexis. Kind of you to leave me a positive note. All the best. Sincerely Brian
One Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 7:22 AM
Nice choice of wording and take on the contest.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Sambourne Avatar
November 25, 2020 at 7:32 AM
Wonderful idea for a poetry contest - juxtaposition. A solitary hiker uplifted by the lone purity of a songbird's call seemed to fit your requirements. Best wishes always, Brian
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