Reborn

Reborn here now without baggage, there’s nothing to weigh me down. I’m like an unsullied package that shines like a white bridal gown. I am smiling. Oh, can you see? Reborn here now without baggage, I can do anything. I’m free, and I have every advantage. With joy I know I can manage the trials that soon I will face. Reborn here now without baggage, all life I’m prepared to embrace. Perfection I know can’t last long. With time, there always is damage. Praise to God though will be my song - reborn here now without baggage. Oct. 11, 2021 for unseeking seeker's Dawn Poetry Contest

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Paulette Calasibetta

Date: 10/22/2021 9:50:00 AM

Andrea, this is absolutely beautiful~The first stanza.."Reborn here now without baggage, there's nothing to weigh me down...etc. AWESOME! Blessings, Paulette

Ann Peck

Date: 10/21/2021 10:15:00 AM

Your poem sounds like the thoughts a bride would have. Very beautiful! Congratulations on placing!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/20/2021 10:03:00 AM

Just lovely Andrea. Love the metaphor of the "package." That is so creative and unique. Sending you blessings dear friend.

Meghan Hutchings

Date: 10/18/2021 7:40:00 PM

Congratulations! Beautiful job!

Jenna Logan

Date: 10/18/2021 10:33:00 AM

Congrats on your placement.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/18/2021 9:51:00 AM

There is emotion…joy in this unique take! Congratulations, Andrea!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/18/2021 6:58:00 AM

I’m not familiar with Christian traditions but your outstanding poem made me sit up and take notice! Congrats on your win Andrea! Thank you for participating and look forward to your entry in the next Quietus contest coming up!

John Watt

Date: 10/13/2021 10:37:00 PM

You came up with some great rhymes for baggage. All I could think of were saggage and gaggage, neither which would have helped much, haha. Lovely thoughts - how nice it would be to be reborn without baggage.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/17/2021 12:45:00 PM

well, doesn't baggage go away the minute you are reborn? That was how I was taught the concepts. Not that I am reborn myself!!! Far from it, haha!!!

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/12/2021 2:16:00 PM

Excellent poem Andrea. I love it. So well written. :)

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 10/12/2021 1:17:00 PM

This is wonderful, Andrea. I simply love it! I couldn't think of more perfect lines! Awesome writing. God bless you always. Love, Gina

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 10/12/2021 11:07:00 AM

So well penned meaningful a poem for Seeker's contest Ria... The first line that he set for us for the contest itself is awesome and you have elaborated it well with your thoughtful pen and rose well to the challenge...Nice imagery too...I see here..."an unsullied package that shines like a white bridal gown"... and perfect rhyming...Best wishes and hugs... ~ Ani

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2021 12:46:00 PM

thanks, Ani, there sure were not rhymes to be used with baggage but all mine I think were actual 100% rhymes according to rhyme zone.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/12/2021 10:34:00 AM

Well done; well penned. Well thought out. Well put. Wonderfully written.

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/12/2021 9:42:00 AM

You've submitted a fantastic contest entry, Andrea. Your imagery is stunning, with the ideal topic. You even came up with rhymes to go along with the optimistic message. I liked the artwork you made here.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2021 12:47:00 PM

hmm, I would like to see the artwork. It must be an ad you are seeing. That's funny Sometimes we get ads that seem to match with our poems. Thanks, Lasaad.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 10/12/2021 6:13:00 AM

One of the best I have read on this theme, Andrea. You found the rhymes to go with your upbeat message. Yes--I see the smile.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2021 12:47:00 PM

Thanks, Vijay. I just hope this is the nature of the theme the sponsor was looking for.

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/12/2021 1:50:00 AM

I find this quite sad Andrea, a premonition of woe. Hope things are ok.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2021 7:05:00 AM

I did not mean it to be a premonition of woe, harry. I was simply writing a poem per the requirements of unseeking seeker. I was thinking how reborn Christians must feel when they are newly baptized, that's all.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/11/2021 10:32:00 PM

I'm sure this should please the Seeker. I am not used to his using "ego" and your use of baggage. All in all a lovely poem.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2021 12:49:00 PM

baggage was the sponsor's word choice. Where are you getting the ''ego" thing from?

Arthur Vaso

Date: 10/11/2021 10:30:00 PM

Sadly you are not only not reborn, you prevent life from existing, stop praising god and start praising science. Without vaccines 80% of us would not even be alive today.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 10/12/2021 7:04:00 AM

give it a rest, Arthur. If you paid attention to anything other than mainstream news, you might learn that the V itself is killing people and that is why doctors, nurses, pilots, police, etc are walking off their jobs rather than be jabbed. yeah, I am preventing life from existing. Right. Wow!! and 80% of us would not be alive without the V. You are brainwashed beyond comprehension. Go bother someone else with your utter nonsense.