Rebellious Mind

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This field is crowded with competition I won't share any aspects of my position In a never-ending battle to stay alive While our gaze was wide, we failed to contrive Ever in search of some sort of growth? Yet we decay in the dismal dust of sloth As time goes on, the truth turns neutral Realize that the current era is crucial None have altered the way quarks behave It's not yet time to swim and dive with a wave Why have we been so productive recently? Let's cast our conflicts behind us peacefully Here, our core fantasies are the only limit The sky is endless, and I never spent a minute There is no room for gradual success A pick that showed the finest fourth express There would be no impetus for us to mature Glad to have met those who let sense be secure. Written: May 25, 2023

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/26/2023 1:38:00 AM

Let's cast our conflicts behind us peacefully. Such a great advice.

Ann Cantu

Date: 5/25/2023 7:44:00 PM

Ah, such is the poet’s lot. Good one, Sotto. Stay rebellious.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/25/2023 12:39:00 PM

this poem got better and better for me as it went along. I really love this part: Here, our core fantasies are the only limit The sky is endless, and I never spent a minute . . .

Joe Maverick

Date: 5/25/2023 11:11:00 AM

Good rhyming,and you capture some of Lifes foibles, in an interesting way.'