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Reality: Shadows Surrounding Humanity

I have stopped dreaming about the dilapidating person, And began to open the vital eyes of the forlorn reality, Yet, if you observe the time’s dimension in milliseconds Then you would realise the existence of dark shadows, Lurking to fish ancient chaste villages for Today’s Special*, Headlines switching from the wasteland to the desert, As if a show screening for the mindless masses of meat**, No sense of life! And copious shadows still hunt puppets out of souls. I have stopped dreaming about the pristine person As I observed the wilderness in the city of Deer AlZoor, Smiles did flourish in the small villages along the river, Until the putrid puppets placed their powerful*** hands On the soon-to-disappear persons of joy and glory, The puppet’s contaminated minds removing all hope, A move towards ethnic cleansing was just the start, No sense of life! And the shadows plan on barricading the city of Dar’a. Sunday, 28th of September 2014 * metaphor for trying to find new ways to kill people ** consonance alliteration 'm' and meat is a metaphor for persons *** consonance alliteration 'p' and there are many more :P

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Date: 10/7/2014 4:59:00 PM
Reality's a student of mine. I like what you did here, you have a wonderful way in sharing your perception through poetry. HSK,, A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the community. You'll find many friendly poets, who are ready to support and give positive feedback. I want to be the first to invite you on over, to the contest page. I OFFER MY CONTEST, in hopes it inspires you to write another poem. I'm looking forward to following you and your poetry:) Here's the link to the contest page. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry_contests/ <---~Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Date: 10/8/2014 2:24:00 PM
Thanks heaps Linda for your kind words, I really appreciate it, and I'm glad that people here understand the true meaning of poetry (few of my family understand what I'm saying, hehehe) ^.^ And thank you for the invitation, I'll be sure to check it out and enter :P
Date: 10/7/2014 11:13:00 AM
HSK, Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. I will get much delight, in reading and in time become familiar with your verse. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile, others passed, when I first join the soup 4 years ago. I wish you the best when it comes to your compositions. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT
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Date: 10/7/2014 2:07:00 PM
Seriously, what you just said is sooo warm and welcoming, it is amazing to meet people like you.. and OF COURSE you are my newest friend =^.^= I'm looking forward to check out your poems (probs on the weekend) hehehe... btw, my moto in life is "always smile 'cause Earth is a much better place with one extra smile" and then you greet me with the same smile. Thank you my new friend :) -HSK AlKendi
Date: 10/5/2014 4:02:00 PM
The content was so important & the imagery splendid you did miss a third devise for your *** mark [persons of joy and glory] these are 'feelings' which you are having us see as people] Congrad's on your win please do enter my next contest. Light & Love
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Hsk Alkendi
Date: 10/6/2014 8:34:00 AM
Thank you so much for your comment and your context, cant wait for the next one :)
Date: 10/5/2014 11:42:00 AM
This is a captivating, informative yet sad poem. Very well expressed, HSK. I see you are new on Soup, so welcome and enjoy yourself. Congratulations on a well deserved win. // paul
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Date: 10/5/2014 2:19:00 PM
Thanks Paul, much appreciated ^^,
Date: 10/5/2014 9:28:00 AM
:) i wonder what HSk means? This poem is intriguing.. :D you got me reading it twice..:) kudos!! welcome to poetrysoup.. :D! i have been here two years now and i really am having fun.. :D
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Date: 10/5/2014 2:18:00 PM
HSK are the letters of my initials and AlKendi is my tribe. Thank you for your kind words :D
Date: 10/5/2014 12:08:00 AM
A very deep powerful piece - well done! Welcome to PoetrySoup and happy writings! Pandita
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Date: 10/5/2014 2:13:00 AM
Thank you and I'm glad I join it :D
Date: 10/4/2014 9:52:00 PM
Hi HSK, It is refreshing to see an intellectually, well crafted piece like this, with an abundance of thought provoking concepts. It has great merit. Congratulations on a well deserved win. Earl
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Hsk Alkendi
Date: 10/5/2014 2:13:00 AM
Thank you :D
Date: 10/4/2014 5:15:00 PM
I see we have another talented poet here. Welcome and congratulations on your amazing winning poem. Brenda
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Date: 10/4/2014 5:24:00 PM
thanks a lot Brenda, and to be honest I did not know that I won until I got my first comment, hehe :D
Date: 10/4/2014 1:36:00 PM
- Warm welcome to PoetrySoup, HSK- Well done and congrats on your win ! - Nice to meet you! - Hope you will be satisfied with our "soup family" - we are many .. but has plenty of room for you too- Be kind and keep PoetrySoup as a haven -(Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours.) Thank you for posted your words and thoughts here, I want to come back to read more another day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/4/2014 3:07:00 PM
oh wow, thanks heaps for your kind words, i'm kinda hoping to continue in this 'soup family' hehe .. your words really impacted me, didn't expect it, really really appreciate it .. and I intend to read other's poems and comment on them too, 'cause i know i can learn heaps from them :D
Date: 10/4/2014 10:07:00 AM
You have taken us to a land that many would rather not know, yet so skillfully, and captivating, and puts a sadness in my heart! Well done, and great use of the devices of Deb's contest, which one doesn't hardly notice, for the flow is so natural. Congrats to you
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Date: 10/4/2014 11:55:00 AM
Thanks heaps. Yeah, the area is harsh and difficult to make clear factual description of the situation. There were also 4 'dream' poems that preceded this one and it would've made more sense, maybe, if I put them up, but I am kinda new to this website :P
Date: 10/4/2014 9:44:00 AM
Captivating expressions, HSK, congrats on the fine win
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Hsk Alkendi
Date: 10/4/2014 11:56:00 AM
thanks a lot, much appreciated

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