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Watched the beginning of the musical "South Pacific," yesterday. This poem is only inspired by the sights and the lusting sailors in the musical. I don't know if I've watched it before. My hubby came upstairs and asked if I wanted to watch a different movie so yes, of course...lol. He is not much into musicals. 

purple waters and a palm; drops coconuts on the sailors. mutts - the enlisted; maritime props in greedy hands - bum hat of klutz. weave of straw skirt - she laughs him off. the nail in his coffin; alive. she’s ugly with mesmerized cough. without real girls, how to survive… yellow and green mists, pink and blue. misfits would sell their souls, embark on this adventure to pursue real girls they can’t see in the dark. swooshy-swoosh, they shove past the flow. the foam, ferocious. thatched rooftops just over the shark-tooth waves. go, looking for girls with lush backdrops. ooh-la-la vegetation, pert ebonic vines swing from girls’ heads. officers anchor their feet, skirt past the uncouth, off to real beds.

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Date: 6/2/2025 8:55:00 AM
It seems like those boys learned their lesson, and "she laughs them off" "she’s ugly with mesmerized cough" taught them something. Sometimes real girls are hard to find, lol...feminine without a backdrop. I enjoyed this- hope I'm on the right track, lol.
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Paige Hind
Date: 6/2/2025 3:14:00 PM
LOL okay- :P
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 6/2/2025 2:59:00 PM
The pretty girls fall for the officers. lol

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