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That life is a struggle, there's no denying when the distance between light and dark is just one misstep across the boundary line Problematic for mankind since time began Prompted by the reminder of crows flying I have need to heed his words in the great book There's truth there to find courage and strength Armor and shield to prepare me for the fight In chapter and verse I found it when I searched for the way out, a way to escape the sea of madness I pray not to get lost in the dark swells I abhor It's the only way to assure my soul's salvation Ravens roost there, in a forest of leafless trees where damnation spills its virulent seeds There, in the shadows of the valley of death— like carrion for the picking, is how they see me Blackguard avians wanting to spread their disease Beady eyes following me as I walk through the mist Waiting like vultures for me to take my last breath To save myself from plight of battle and eternal death I pray to defeat the demons crying out for me, concentrate on the consciousness of mind over matter and denounce the thought of "What will be, will be." I must avoid the darkness for in its shadows, sings the ruthless caws of ravens, fluttering their black wings I've come to despise the sound of their beastly cries Behind me the sound arises again, that baleful cawing and ominous sight; the murder of crows taking flight Overhead, they squawk a challenge with talons clawing but I will face the soulless demons that tyrannise me To their offers of temptation, I vow never to succumb for a sin it would be to forsake my will to remain free

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Date: 5/27/2025 6:58:00 AM
‘ Ravens roost there, in a forest of leafless trees’… I really enjoyed the imagery in your poem. Congrats on placing. My new contest is on Ronnie James Dio songs. I’m curious as how you will write for him as his songs are as powerful as you write.
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Date: 5/12/2025 5:19:00 PM
Lin, you can certainly capture the mood of darkness. It's really remarkable how you do it. I can imagine all those birds and being within one misstep of a bad end. You are more than the equal of Poe. Take care and smiles!!
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Date: 5/13/2025 1:40:00 AM
I think perhaps the mood of darkness captured me, Duke. I slip a little too easily into a shroud I'd rather not wear, but once it's splayed across my shoulders, I am in that realm. Thank you for your thoughts, but Poe would have my heart beneath his floor if he read your comment. lol ;-)
Date: 5/11/2025 4:39:00 AM
Dear Linnersz, this is a brilliant take on the song lyrics, i especially love the fact that your words emanate such wisdom and so many truths that we must also remind ourselves as life needs to be a balance of darkness and light and sometimes we need that mental and emotional push to embrace the light more! I love so many lines especially "Blackguard avians wanting to spread their disease Beady eyes following me as I walk through the mist Waiting like vultures for me to take my last breath" your wordplay and imagery and how youve woven this truly left me in awe impressed! Definitely a new fave for me! Best wishes! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/13/2025 1:38:00 AM
Thank you for allowing me to see where my thoughts led yours, Ink. I'm really delighted you found it so much to your liking.
Date: 5/10/2025 7:16:00 PM
written in a way that expresses how principle you are with life choices...good luck dear poet
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Date: 5/11/2025 2:31:00 AM
Good morning and thank you very much for your kind thoughts, Frederic.
Date: 5/10/2025 9:03:00 AM
"blackguard avians"...Lin, I think I like this dark side of your mystically mysterious visit to this Valley of Shadows. Masterfully written and subtly devious, I shall sleep with a light on tonight...maybe two...
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Date: 5/10/2025 10:25:00 AM
Sometimes I creep myself out when writing in the shadows. Thank you, John. I'd suggest making sure your windows are closed as well.

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