Raven

It was dark, dark, so very dark
blacker than the blackest black
no full, half, quarter or sliver
as if the moon had fled in terror
as if it knew something I did not
as if it knew my time was at hand...

Something brushed my ear
A flapping sound in the distance
wheeling back closer, closer
A slap on my face then I knew
I knew then it would return
to perch on my shoulder

to croak it’s haunted wisdom
to recall old, forgotten fears
“Oh no foolish lad, not forgotten
only buried, only denied. Face it”

It’s mighty claws drew blood
It’s razor beak slashed my face
I collapsed face down and bled
bled it out, soaking the earth red

Quoth The Raven:
“Turn now and look to the east”
The sun was rising.

*Inspired by the Edgar Allan Poe poem
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Troutman Avatar
August 8, 2016 at 6:36 PM
That's really wonderfully frightening, congratulations!
Richards Avatar
August 6, 2016 at 10:18 AM
P=As if the moon had fled in terror !!! What a great line that is !!! Well done, dear Tim!!!
Lamoureux Avatar
August 6, 2016 at 8:05 AM
This has a Stephen King feel to it. For me that is high compliment, he is one of my favorite authors.
Lamoureux Avatar
August 6, 2016 at 8:05 AM
Oops I forgot to say congratulations.
A   Avatar
August 6, 2016 at 2:09 AM
Hello TIM, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Stop by my blog "BOSSY COW." if you'd like, enjoy my sheer, simple madness. Hugs ~LINDA~
O'Leary Avatar
December 4, 2015 at 11:53 PM
EAP would've liked this... Very nice!!!
Negron Flores Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 6:45 AM
Congratulations Tim.
A. Sharma Avatar
December 3, 2015 at 4:05 AM
Brilliant write Tim.. congrats on great win!
A  Avatar
December 2, 2015 at 11:34 PM
WOW, Tim, Congratulations on your Poe, Poe WIN! SKAT :)
A  Avatar
May 3, 2015 at 10:31 PM
Tim, Congratulations on your win. Thanks for the support. SKAT
A   Avatar
February 16, 2015 at 1:19 AM
Tim, Congratulations in Kelly D's contest. Always ~LINDA
A  Avatar
February 15, 2015 at 10:21 PM
Tim, CONGRATS on your awesome placement ~ SKAT ~
Allison Avatar
February 7, 2015 at 2:48 PM
a haunting write - many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
Deschler Avatar
February 7, 2015 at 1:59 PM
This wonderful poem has left a lasting impression on my mind ever since "The Raven" contest. I vividly remember it as one of my favorites. Congrats on the win and thank you for participating, Tim!
Breidenthal Avatar
October 30, 2014 at 4:56 PM
I love this poem here. "it was dark, dark, so very dark blacker than the blackest black" terrifying descriptions followed by terrifying revelations. Greatly enjoyed! Always, Laura
Richards Avatar
October 14, 2014 at 1:22 PM
Wow Tim.........you do have an element of dark and creepy behind your innocent ways......lol !! I loved this one ! Congrats to you !! ( creepy meant in a good way...tee-hee,!!!)
Mehta Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 9:45 PM
This is quite a haunting write, Tim, Congrats on the win
Gorelick Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 8:02 PM
Wow, this was scary...I have read it several times and it gets better each time. Congrats. BG
Deschler Avatar
October 13, 2014 at 6:10 PM
A dark story, so dramatically told! Your descriptions of the setting were really wonderful, Tim. It drew me in right away! Congratulations on your win!
Manassian Avatar
October 9, 2014 at 11:41 PM
This is very haunting, Tim. I will show that nasty Raven away and we will collab on a new twist to Poe. ;) Are you game?
Dietrich Avatar
September 28, 2014 at 12:05 PM
wow, you really got inspired from THAT contest!! VERY nicely done, Tim. I really like where you took it. By the way, did you hear the sad news that Lucilla passed away? It's in PD's blog. So nice of Linda to tell us about it.
Devonshire Avatar
September 28, 2014 at 4:34 AM
Quite a frightening tale, Tim. It is like a nightmare that comes to life. Wish you the best in Kelly's contest!
Ryerson Avatar
September 28, 2014 at 4:55 AM
Have a blessed Sunday dear lady...Hope You like Elvis! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BIlJ91mvXzc
Ryerson Avatar
September 28, 2014 at 4:49 AM
Thank you dear lady...
Sirak Avatar
September 27, 2014 at 8:13 AM
Well done! The line "I knew then it would return to perch on my shoulder" holds such terror. I think you have a winner here.
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 25, 2014 at 9:00 PM
A wonderful entry for Kelly's contest Tim. It would do splendid if I were judging! Best of luck in the contest.
Puddifoot Avatar
September 25, 2014 at 5:08 PM
I like that fourth line "as if the moon had fled in terror", that's a very effective line; my poem lucy westenra's diary was along similar dark lines, only on the dracula theme - good luck in the contest (I've replied to email)
Lamoureux Avatar
September 25, 2014 at 9:08 AM
Very effective, reminded me of Roland of Gilead from the Gunslinger series by Stephen King.
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