Raven

It was dark, dark, so very dark
blacker than the blackest black
no full, half, quarter or sliver
as if the moon had fled in terror
as if it knew something I did not
as if it knew my time was at hand...

Something brushed my ear
A flapping sound in the distance
wheeling back closer, closer
A slap on my face then I knew
I knew then it would return
to perch on my shoulder

to croak it’s haunted wisdom
to recall old, forgotten fears
“Oh no foolish lad, not forgotten
only buried, only denied. Face it”

It’s mighty claws drew blood
It’s razor beak slashed my face
I collapsed face down and bled
bled it out, soaking the earth red

Quoth The Raven:
“Turn now and look to the east”
The sun was rising.

*Inspired by the Edgar Allan Poe poem
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014


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Date: 8/8/2016 6:36:00 PM
That's really wonderfully frightening, congratulations!
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Date: 8/6/2016 10:18:00 AM
P=As if the moon had fled in terror !!! What a great line that is !!! Well done, dear Tim!!!
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Date: 8/6/2016 8:05:00 AM
This has a Stephen King feel to it. For me that is high compliment, he is one of my favorite authors.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/6/2016 8:05:00 AM
Oops I forgot to say congratulations.
Date: 8/6/2016 2:09:00 AM
Hello TIM, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Stop by my blog "BOSSY COW." if you'd like, enjoy my sheer, simple madness. Hugs ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/4/2015 11:53:00 PM
EAP would've liked this... Very nice!!!
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Date: 12/3/2015 6:45:00 AM
Congratulations Tim.
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Date: 12/3/2015 4:05:00 AM
Brilliant write Tim.. congrats on great win!
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Date: 12/2/2015 11:34:00 PM
WOW, Tim, Congratulations on your Poe, Poe WIN! SKAT :)
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Date: 5/3/2015 10:31:00 PM
Tim, Congratulations on your win. Thanks for the support. SKAT
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Date: 2/16/2015 1:19:00 AM
Tim, Congratulations in Kelly D's contest. Always ~LINDA
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Date: 2/15/2015 10:21:00 PM
Tim, CONGRATS on your awesome placement ~ SKAT ~
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Date: 2/7/2015 2:48:00 PM
a haunting write - many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/7/2015 1:59:00 PM
This wonderful poem has left a lasting impression on my mind ever since "The Raven" contest. I vividly remember it as one of my favorites. Congrats on the win and thank you for participating, Tim!
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Date: 10/30/2014 4:56:00 PM
I love this poem here. "it was dark, dark, so very dark blacker than the blackest black" terrifying descriptions followed by terrifying revelations. Greatly enjoyed! Always, Laura
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Date: 10/14/2014 1:22:00 PM
Wow Tim.........you do have an element of dark and creepy behind your innocent ways......lol !! I loved this one ! Congrats to you !! ( creepy meant in a good way...tee-hee,!!!)
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Date: 10/13/2014 9:45:00 PM
This is quite a haunting write, Tim, Congrats on the win
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Date: 10/13/2014 8:02:00 PM
Wow, this was scary...I have read it several times and it gets better each time. Congrats. BG
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Date: 10/13/2014 6:10:00 PM
A dark story, so dramatically told! Your descriptions of the setting were really wonderful, Tim. It drew me in right away! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 10/9/2014 11:41:00 PM
This is very haunting, Tim. I will show that nasty Raven away and we will collab on a new twist to Poe. ;) Are you game?
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Date: 9/28/2014 12:05:00 PM
wow, you really got inspired from THAT contest!! VERY nicely done, Tim. I really like where you took it. By the way, did you hear the sad news that Lucilla passed away? It's in PD's blog. So nice of Linda to tell us about it.
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Date: 9/28/2014 4:34:00 AM
Quite a frightening tale, Tim. It is like a nightmare that comes to life. Wish you the best in Kelly's contest!
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Tim Ryerson
Date: 9/28/2014 4:55:00 AM
Have a blessed Sunday dear lady...Hope You like Elvis! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BIlJ91mvXzc
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Tim Ryerson
Date: 9/28/2014 4:49:00 AM
Thank you dear lady...
Date: 9/27/2014 8:13:00 AM
Well done! The line "I knew then it would return to perch on my shoulder" holds such terror. I think you have a winner here.
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Date: 9/25/2014 9:00:00 PM
A wonderful entry for Kelly's contest Tim. It would do splendid if I were judging! Best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 9/25/2014 5:08:00 PM
I like that fourth line "as if the moon had fled in terror", that's a very effective line; my poem lucy westenra's diary was along similar dark lines, only on the dracula theme - good luck in the contest (I've replied to email)
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Date: 9/25/2014 9:08:00 AM
Very effective, reminded me of Roland of Gilead from the Gunslinger series by Stephen King.
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