Get Your Premium Membership

Raven

It was dark, dark, so very dark blacker than the blackest black no full, half, quarter or sliver as if the moon had fled in terror as if it knew something I did not as if it knew my time was at hand... Something brushed my ear A flapping sound in the distance wheeling back closer, closer A slap on my face then I knew I knew then it would return to perch on my shoulder to croak it’s haunted wisdom to recall old, forgotten fears “Oh no foolish lad, not forgotten only buried, only denied. Face it” It’s mighty claws drew blood It’s razor beak slashed my face I collapsed face down and bled bled it out, soaking the earth red Quoth The Raven: “Turn now and look to the east” The sun was rising. *Inspired by the Edgar Allan Poe poem

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

12
Date: 8/8/2016 6:36:00 PM
That's really wonderfully frightening, congratulations!
Login to Reply
Date: 8/6/2016 10:18:00 AM
P=As if the moon had fled in terror !!! What a great line that is !!! Well done, dear Tim!!!
Login to Reply
Date: 8/6/2016 8:05:00 AM
This has a Stephen King feel to it. For me that is high compliment, he is one of my favorite authors.
Login to Reply
Lamoureux Avatar
Richard Lamoureux
Date: 8/6/2016 8:05:00 AM
Oops I forgot to say congratulations.
Date: 8/6/2016 2:09:00 AM
Hello TIM, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Stop by my blog "BOSSY COW." if you'd like, enjoy my sheer, simple madness. Hugs ~LINDA~
Login to Reply
Date: 12/4/2015 11:53:00 PM
EAP would've liked this... Very nice!!!
Login to Reply
Date: 12/3/2015 6:45:00 AM
Congratulations Tim.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/3/2015 4:05:00 AM
Brilliant write Tim.. congrats on great win!
Login to Reply
Date: 12/2/2015 11:34:00 PM
WOW, Tim, Congratulations on your Poe, Poe WIN! SKAT :)
Login to Reply
Date: 5/3/2015 10:31:00 PM
Tim, Congratulations on your win. Thanks for the support. SKAT
Login to Reply
Date: 2/16/2015 1:19:00 AM
Tim, Congratulations in Kelly D's contest. Always ~LINDA
Login to Reply
Date: 2/15/2015 10:21:00 PM
Tim, CONGRATS on your awesome placement ~ SKAT ~
Login to Reply
Date: 2/7/2015 2:48:00 PM
a haunting write - many congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
Login to Reply
Date: 2/7/2015 1:59:00 PM
This wonderful poem has left a lasting impression on my mind ever since "The Raven" contest. I vividly remember it as one of my favorites. Congrats on the win and thank you for participating, Tim!
Login to Reply
Date: 10/30/2014 4:56:00 PM
I love this poem here. "it was dark, dark, so very dark blacker than the blackest black" terrifying descriptions followed by terrifying revelations. Greatly enjoyed! Always, Laura
Login to Reply
Date: 10/14/2014 1:22:00 PM
Wow Tim.........you do have an element of dark and creepy behind your innocent ways......lol !! I loved this one ! Congrats to you !! ( creepy meant in a good way...tee-hee,!!!)
Login to Reply
Date: 10/13/2014 9:45:00 PM
This is quite a haunting write, Tim, Congrats on the win
Login to Reply
Date: 10/13/2014 8:02:00 PM
Wow, this was scary...I have read it several times and it gets better each time. Congrats. BG
Login to Reply
Date: 10/13/2014 6:10:00 PM
A dark story, so dramatically told! Your descriptions of the setting were really wonderful, Tim. It drew me in right away! Congratulations on your win!
Login to Reply
Date: 10/9/2014 11:41:00 PM
This is very haunting, Tim. I will show that nasty Raven away and we will collab on a new twist to Poe. ;) Are you game?
Login to Reply
Date: 9/28/2014 12:05:00 PM
wow, you really got inspired from THAT contest!! VERY nicely done, Tim. I really like where you took it. By the way, did you hear the sad news that Lucilla passed away? It's in PD's blog. So nice of Linda to tell us about it.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/28/2014 4:34:00 AM
Quite a frightening tale, Tim. It is like a nightmare that comes to life. Wish you the best in Kelly's contest!
Login to Reply
Ryerson Avatar
Tim Ryerson
Date: 9/28/2014 4:55:00 AM
Have a blessed Sunday dear lady...Hope You like Elvis! https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BIlJ91mvXzc
Ryerson Avatar
Tim Ryerson
Date: 9/28/2014 4:49:00 AM
Thank you dear lady...
Date: 9/27/2014 8:13:00 AM
Well done! The line "I knew then it would return to perch on my shoulder" holds such terror. I think you have a winner here.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/25/2014 9:00:00 PM
A wonderful entry for Kelly's contest Tim. It would do splendid if I were judging! Best of luck in the contest.
Login to Reply
Date: 9/25/2014 5:08:00 PM
I like that fourth line "as if the moon had fled in terror", that's a very effective line; my poem lucy westenra's diary was along similar dark lines, only on the dracula theme - good luck in the contest (I've replied to email)
Login to Reply
Date: 9/25/2014 9:08:00 AM
Very effective, reminded me of Roland of Gilead from the Gunslinger series by Stephen King.
Login to Reply
12

Book: Reflection on the Important Things