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Raven

Raven

He riffled through his thoughts erecting a wall;
black eyes from unplumbed depth of shifting sea.
Gray as gray, as the raven mocks and pin
with a withering look a prostrate pawn.
Impotent to think of anything at all
other than him on this ghostly bleak night.

His breath a combustion of nightmares
a roar of extreme death fear and horror,
suspend or expel like a reservoir.
The sounds, smells, and sights of a brittle star
and fierce with the passing of time.
His thoughts often turned an engorged raven in silent ire.


3/29/2018

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Gauthier Avatar
April 11, 2018 at 9:44 PM
Congrats on your podium finish, Eve. Superbly done.
Donnelly Avatar
April 3, 2018 at 3:32 AM
The darkness of the raven penned well, Eve. I particularly like the line, "black eyes from unplumbed depth of shifting sea". :) Congrats! ~ Artsie
Gentry Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 10:36 PM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed your interpretation of the pic.
Allison Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 5:55 PM
many congrats on your win Eve:-) hugs jan xx
Onclaud Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 12:08 PM
ohh, this surely is a winner, eve... big congrats to you.. huggs
Canerdy Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 11:18 AM
CONGRATS on your win, Eve.
Sands Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 9:09 AM
Congratulations for your win Eve ! :)
Andresen Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 8:31 AM
- Congratulations on your winning poem, Eve :) - Enjoy the last days of Easter :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pigeon Tart Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 8:21 AM
"His breath a combustion of nightmares" a drop dead gorgeous line Eve, the entire poem stirring with eloquence, congratulations on your win! Muchos hugs :) mo!
May Avatar
April 1, 2018 at 7:29 AM
"His breath a combustion of nightmares" Very nicely penned Eve..Congrats on your win..
Dietrich Avatar
March 31, 2018 at 4:11 PM
Poe-ish!! Nice and dark one about the raven!! Always I think of Nevermore when I see a poem like this!!
Horne Avatar
March 31, 2018 at 2:36 PM
very powerful stuff
Neumann Avatar
March 31, 2018 at 5:22 AM
Impressive image. I like this, Kai
Murray Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 4:38 PM
Wonderfully done Eve. Best wishes for the contest.
Roper Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 9:12 PM
thank you, Jean and the for the best wishes. Have a wonderful Easter Hugs Eve..
Cozart Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 2:14 PM
That is the image I would've chosen because it is so compelling. Unfortunately I couldn't think of anything. You have done quite nicely with it.
Roper Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 9:13 PM
thank you , Dale, the picture was very intriguing. Have a wonderful Easter Hugs Eve
One Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 10:46 AM
A dark write, perfect for that pic..
Roper Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 9:14 PM
Thank you, Silent One. Have a wonderful Easter Hugs Eve
B. Avatar
March 29, 2018 at 7:55 PM
Awesome creativity Eve!! I enjoyed it!! Fantastic imagery..
Roper Avatar
March 30, 2018 at 9:15 PM
Thank you, Robertina..Have a wonderful Easter Hugs Eve
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