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Ravaged

ragged was the old man- (rain fell in a downpour ) rosary beads in hand raspy quiet his voice respectful ... asked for cash ~ rummaging I found change ~ (raw the reality) __________________ April 15, 2021 Poetry/Pleiades Verse/ravaged Copyright Protected, ID 04-1347-169-15 All Rights Reserved, 2021, Constance La France Written for the Standard contest, Pleiades R sponsor, Kim Merryman, Judged 04/19/2021 Third Place

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Susan Ashley

Date: 4/20/2021 6:58:00 PM

Dear Constance, your vibrant imagery doesn't overshadow the profound sadness of this scene.. that is the grand poetic talent of your emotional pen. Congratulations for your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Constance La France
Date: 4/21/2021 7:44:00 AM

Susan, thanks for the compliment and the congratulations, love _Constance

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/19/2021 4:23:00 PM

Very moving, Constance! You get a clear picture of what you are portraying. Congrats on your win in my contest! Blessings, Kim M

Constance La France
Date: 4/20/2021 11:19:00 AM

Kim, thanks for the inspiration and placement in your contest, the compliment and congrats, love _Constance

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 4/17/2021 2:39:00 PM

You depict such a striking picture, I can see the old man in the rain, and the somber dignity of the scene~

Constance La France
Date: 4/17/2021 2:42:00 PM

Michelle, exactly what I wanted, thanks so much for the visit and comment, love _Constance

Kyle Kriticos

Date: 4/16/2021 9:07:00 AM

This was exceptional! Well written my fellow canadian!

Constance La France
Date: 4/16/2021 11:31:00 AM

Kyle, thank you for the compliment on my poem, appreciate fellow Canadian, love _Constance

Janice Canerdy

Date: 4/16/2021 6:12:00 AM

So moving--well done, Constance! Janice

Constance La France
Date: 4/16/2021 11:32:00 AM

Janice, thanks for the visit and compliment, love _Constance

Joseph May

Date: 4/15/2021 7:36:00 AM

A somber and "raw reality", Well depicted Constance, best wishes

Constance La France
Date: 4/15/2021 2:58:00 PM

Joseph, thanks for visiting and commenting, and the compliment, a sad reality in my city, old people and young people begging for money, Love _Constance