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A senryu written for the contest Hi-poo sponsored by John Lawless, this is inspired by my friend Sabrina who is struggling with an uninvited king in her house ruling over stealing her sleep! Rats can be scary and cunning and when pest control arrives they hide like cowards, any suggestions on how to get this rat out? my attempt to make her smile lol

Throned green eyed rat in golden trap of cheesy poo he rules like a king

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/31/2023 7:39:00 PM

back with my congrats, dear empress

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/30/2023 4:25:00 PM

Was pretty sure I commented before, but…I love this green-eyed rat Inky! Congratulations on your win! :)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/30/2023 10:39:00 PM

Awwn thank u so much for your well wishes so grateful

Jan Allison

Date: 10/30/2023 7:53:00 AM

I definitely smell a rat with this one, hope your friend eradicates the king. many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx

Ink Empress
Date: 10/30/2023 10:38:00 PM

Haha, yes it was sorted, turned our was two rats. Thank you for your well wishes. Grateful for your support

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/8/2023 4:22:00 AM

Okay!! Rats are very intelligent. Those very large ones like field rats or wharf rats are even more of a problem. If all food sources are put where they can't get to them helps, rat poison helps, but the stink when it dies and it can't be found is horrible. I don't know if those larger rats are too smart to get caught in a trap or not, but I am thinking they could be. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for thinking of making your friend laugh. Your visit to my page with congrats was nice. Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 10/9/2023 3:43:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your experience and thoughts about rats and how troublesome they can be. Truly grateful for your comment. I appreciate your support

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 10/7/2023 3:07:00 PM

a clever Senyru, Ink. We've never had rats. EEGADS. How awful. This time of year, tiny mice living in nearby fields seek the warmth of the garages of our little neighborhood on the edge of town. Their pesky little things. I'm sure your friend, Sabrina, got a smile from your Senyru. Kind of you. Enjoy your day, Sara

Ink Empress
Date: 10/7/2023 6:53:00 PM

Ah that must be why, i used to have similar incidents too, i had one freaky one maybe three years ago, a rat got into my room and was the worst ever, catching them is one crazy experience, poor sabrina is having anxiety now cus of this . Yes she loved the senryu and said she will read it whenver the rat starts scratching :,) thank you sara as are u kindest of all, beautiful soul, hope u are having a lovely weekend

Charles Messina

Date: 10/7/2023 1:43:00 PM

A king was in my home a few weeks ago, I finally eliminated him by sealing up every passageway he could possibly get in. Unfortunately, I have a soft heart and opened up a space so he could escape because I kept hearing him trying to scratch his way out (lol) BOL in the contest with this very well done haiku, Ink. ~Charlie

Ink Empress
Date: 10/7/2023 6:37:00 PM

Awhn she has a soft heart too and is an animal lover and against killing any, but poor thing is so scared she can barely sleep lol should send you over to her house, you are clever. Thank you so much for the encouragement. Grateful for your visit

Sotto Poet

Date: 10/7/2023 9:50:00 AM

It is remarkable that you are able to transmit such depth of meaning in such a lighthearted manner while using just a few number of syllables in your Senryu expert composition and beautiful imagery. Your carefully chosen words did an excellent job of conveying the issue, and I think that all she needs to do to solve the situation is take in a stray cat and get rid of those rodents.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/7/2023 6:36:00 PM

Thats a brilliant idea thank you for the suggestion, and thank you for the comments. Grateful for your support

Fading Star Silence

Date: 10/6/2023 1:34:00 PM

Ahhhahaha! I can’t! The diversity of your words for every occasion regardless of what, is amazing!! And in such a few words! You get the message across that we should all need to! What else can we compare it to? When those we come across can’t just support or move on, instead dwelling on the negative and insisting on showing such insecurities..no words can speak louder than actions. I raise both hands in the air in surrender to this piece! Brilliantly written with the air it deserves, my beautiful soul sis!! So fitting to all that’s been going on everywhere!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 11:40:00 PM

Lolol u took it to a whole different deep level soul sis! But i get u! Lol haha u made me laugh! Thanks for the support always

Silent One

Date: 10/6/2023 11:41:00 AM

Interesting one.. Cheesy poo is quite a disgusting image.. I really do not like rats or mice.. It is the diseases they carry, such disgusting and horrid creatures... Strangely enough one of my radio presenters was talking about rats on air today.. How she found them disgusting too.. The king of rats must be quite a rat.. why does this rat have green eyes? Funny one for this contest, nice to see your sense of humour..

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 11:39:00 PM

Maybe its the rat season. Yea one cunning fella. Still hiding and scratching away, too afraid to show up. Pest control couldnt find him he is hiding deep. Thanks for the support appreciate it

Paige Hind

Date: 10/6/2023 10:16:00 AM

Ha! This was cute. I liked it.

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 10:20:00 AM

Thank you sweet soul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2023 9:26:00 AM

Haha. I like the image

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 10:02:00 AM

Thank you so much dear poetess

Hiya Sharma

Date: 10/6/2023 9:15:00 AM

Green eyed rat- Hmmm, I bet he's one mischievous and quite troublesome one! I can't believe the way you've beautified this with golden trap, that's just insanely brilliant lol! He rules like a king- Ahhh, it's funny to think when animals and creatures can rule in other's homes but even the humans can't rule their own lives haha.. I hope Sabrina gets rid of them soon.. This one made me laugh a lot btw, I had never read something as funny as this from you, quite new for me haha :)

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 9:24:00 AM

Hahah sabrina has been talking abt this rat all week poor thing i had to cheer her up, she wrote few about the rat too. I know i never write funny lolol thank u sweet angel rats can be troublesome

Sara Jama

Date: 10/6/2023 5:23:00 AM

This is I have no words ink. Cheesy poo ??????. Maybe you can borrow one of my four cats ??. Can't wait to read more

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 5:24:00 AM

Hahaha grumpy can u send the cats over to sabrinas she is in london too! Be useful lol ahhaha witchy cats needed

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 10/6/2023 5:11:00 AM

Your one haiku puts my three in the shade. Well done. Blessings.

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 10/6/2023 4:29:00 AM

Ayyy ayyy ayyyyeeeee damn rat!!! She need some good old sunscreen!!! Pest control won’t work!!! Every time I pest control cockroaches more come!!! So now I sun screen aeee

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 4:47:00 AM

Hahahah u are hilarious

Lioness Onpaper
Date: 10/6/2023 4:45:00 AM

Which family this rat belong to?? U tell me now !!! I’ll grab my shovel n kettle both… coat it with chilli sun screen … see who is goin to end up scratchyyyyy… he think he is dark!!!! Well I am behemoooth!!!!

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 4:43:00 AM

Hahah poor thing! This rat hides … comes out when its dark and starts scratching nasty

Lioness Onpaper
Date: 10/6/2023 4:40:00 AM

Hahahaha .. u dnt underestimate the power of this protection aeee … once get into the eyes the fella will cry on his knees … that’s when Sabrina shud grab a shovel or a kettle and yank it across his head … or or in between his eyes!!!!!! I likes that aeee

Ink Empress
Date: 10/6/2023 4:33:00 AM

Hahah i doubt sunscreen will help this one! He is one cunning fella! Plays big in someone elses home poor sabrina cant sleep

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 10/6/2023 4:28:00 AM

Well interesting