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Rant With a Slant

I challenge you to a rhetorical
to prove me wrong else be unconventional 
‘bout a problem that’s gone systematical
everyone’s so radical and cynical   
once burnt all swear to now be rational
petrified to be poetical and get physical  
relationships always problematical
they start off superficial hardly practical 
usually nonsensical and contradictional
end up analytical emotional or psychological   
enigmatical fanatical or plain lethargical
sometimes as wild as satanical
yet sure enough it’s almost typical 
it’s really absurdly comical
the inevitable becomes the eventual
you go and fall and it’s unconditional
starts off all angelical and sensational
turns out illogical and territorial
often becomes tyrannical  
immoral and unethical 
then cryptical and diabolical   
there has to be something remedial
it’s just too tragical 
how we now prefer to be online virtual
we might as well be asexual
because there’s no sense being sensual
we’re all too freak’n skeptical
to believe in the magical and supernatural
do you have a comeback what’s in your arsenal  
or are you just too visceral
or too darn busy being metaphysical


AP: 2nd place 2020, Honorable Mention 2022

Submitted ton March 5, 2018 for contest QUICK FIRE RAPID RHYME sponsored by BRENDA CHIRI  -  RANKED 4TH
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Dietrich Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 3:22 PM
I did this kind of ranting with monorhyme in another contest recently. Wish I had known Brenda liked monorhyme and I'd have entered my Contamination Nation in THIS contest. hahaha. This is genius! BIG congrats too.
Gauthier Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 3:23 PM
Sounds like your poem would have been a good contender, Andrea. Thank you so much for your visit and comment.
Talbot Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 3:49 AM
Wow, all those al's, amazing, congratulations on your placement Line... Mick
Gauthier Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 7:28 AM
Thank you so much for your visit and comment, Mick. Much appreciated.
Cunningham Avatar
March 27, 2018 at 2:42 AM
Great rant Line. Congratulations.
Gauthier Avatar
March 28, 2018 at 7:28 AM
Thank you fro your much appreciated visit and comment, Tom.
Canerdy Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 7:57 AM
I'm back to say CONGRATS, Line! Janice
Gauthier Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 8:25 AM
Thank you so much, Janice. Most appreciated.
Gentile Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 7:33 AM
Congrats on YOUR win, Line and LOVE your title xxoo
Gauthier Avatar
March 26, 2018 at 8:25 AM
Thank you so much, Mike, for your much appreciated visit and comment.
Roper Avatar
March 25, 2018 at 10:25 PM
Line, congratulations on your win in the contest with this sweet Rhyming poem… Hugs Eve ~`*
Gauthier Avatar
March 25, 2018 at 11:20 PM
Thanks, Eve. Much appreciated.
Thomas Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 2:42 PM
Well dang! You rocked this Line!
Gauthier Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 5:53 PM
Thank you so much. Much appreciated, Shadow.
Gentile Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 8:33 AM
and what a rant, Line !! I'm impressed xxxoo
Gauthier Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 8:52 AM
Thank so much, Mike. Much appreciated.
Canerdy Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 8:32 AM
Whew! THIS is just what the prompt demands, Line. My new fave! Janice
Gauthier Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 8:52 AM
Thank you so much, Janice. Most appreciated.
Wolf Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 8:42 PM
Rapid-fire understates the rat-a-tat-tat effect here, Line. Pretty interesting stuff. Best wishes, FS (Freaking Skeptical, LOL!) AKA Gershon :)
Gauthier Avatar
March 6, 2018 at 7:05 AM
Thanks for your ever appreciated LOL visit and comment, Gershon.
Terry Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 4:33 PM
Ah, what was the question? Lol. That was certainly a lot to take in. Sounds great read aloud. I would definitely call that some clever rapid fire rhyme. Good luck in the contest, Line.
Gauthier Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 6:55 PM
Hooray - my first attempt at rap. Thank you for the vote of confidence, Janece.
Cunningham Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 2:47 PM
I'd never make a rapper, got a bit tongue tied reading it lol. Good luck Line.
Gauthier Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 3:28 PM
OK, Tom, you can do this... walk before you run... LOL
Michael Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 2:28 PM
Fantastic write...breathing...ideas flowing...All the best Line
Gauthier Avatar
March 5, 2018 at 6:55 PM
Thank you so much, Arturo. Most appreciated.
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