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Randomling 23: Ticking

And the clock on the wall kept on ticking while my life fell apart all around me. Sweet memories faded to shadow as my heart fell to pieces inside me. And the clock on the wall kept on ticking Relentlessly ticking, ticking While my world fell apart all around me.

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Eve Roper

Date: 8/16/2015 1:51:00 PM

An Impact with these one to my emotions. Of course we can not do anything in getting old. Good pen and a 7 Hugs Eve

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/15/2015 3:12:00 PM

Mary, I enjoyed this piece. " Relentless tick, ticking While my world fell apart" Wow! Great message within this " randomling" Thanks for sharing:-) Alexis 7

Laura Leiser

Date: 8/15/2015 2:46:00 PM

I really liked the structure of this poem. Perfect for the subject!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/15/2015 2:14:00 PM

I love the impact of the repeated line with just the one word changed - great write Mary:-) hugs Jan xx