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Random Thoughts 20 a Rondel

*****Rondel: A French form with 13 lines: Two quatrains and a quintet.. rhyming is as follows:
ABba, abAB, abbaA*******



Exotic miss caramel swirl,
seductive in her dress of satin.
I had make it happen,
make myself known to this girl.

I approach. Her name is Pearle!
we hit a club in lower Manhattan.
Exotic miss caramel swirl,
seductive in her dress of satin.

I gave salsa dancing a whirl.
I did decent, on a whim.
pheromones erupt from her skin,
this beautiful Latin girl
Exotic miss caramel swirl.



Jared Pickett
9/28/09
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Brandy Nicole

January 15, 2023 at 1:55 PM

:) I can see you "salsa dancing," in my mind. Just sayin'. I love the way your thoughts curl around each other. This is beautiful, romantic and dreamy. Love your random thoughts, and how they create such a breathtaking mood. :) Brandy

Jared Pickett

January 15, 2023 at 2:00 PM

Only in your mind? Lol! The Rondel is one of my favorites to write. The syllable pattern and use of the same lines in different places within each stanza. It brings a different element to the thought.. Much love

Andrea Dietrich

June 3, 2010 at 10:49 PM

Hey, Jared, you should call this rhyme! Just thought i'd mention that since you required no free verse and if anyone looks here for your example, they might get confused. This one really was a delight! andrea

Andrea Dietrich

June 3, 2010 at 10:39 PM

I really like this rondel you showed us. Thanks for identifying it easily for me to locate it in your contest rules. LUv, Andrea

Brandee Augustus

June 2, 2010 at 1:07 PM

Very nice! I really loved this. Lovely flow and such a vivid picture of this night with few words.

Brian Strand

January 24, 2010 at 12:20 AM

Thank you for supporting my contest JP.Rgds Brian

Doris Culverhouse

October 8, 2009 at 2:21 PM

nicely written

James Fraser

October 1, 2009 at 12:43 PM

Miss Caramel Swirl, what a yummy name Jared >> James

Moonbee Canady

September 29, 2009 at 8:39 AM

I Really like this one Jared ... There's nothing like a Night on the Town... Feeling Good, With Good Company and a harmless night of Fun... Keep It Coming Kiddo... You Know... I Think I'll Post A Poem for You... You May Like... (smile) ... Will Send You SoupMail, When It's On... Chow-Bella (smile) MoonBee