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For Ink Empress' Raining in Summer poetry contest

If the sun married the rain - It would become a rainbow (quote by poet) This aquamarine aquarium is a prismatic prison, reflecting a reality of a pseudo persona and I've become tired from pretending behind this veil of pantomime portrayal just like the mind of 'Kurt Cobain.' I hunger for harmony, desiring for juniper and jasmine, to weave and wrap their tendrils, tenderly around an alchemy of angst, but my shroud is a burdensome blanket, like a softly spoken voice in a nocturnal nightclub. I shiver in the sunshine, soaking from secretive somber storm clouds, creating an autumnal aroma, so I'm wondering why it's raining in summer, weeping on fading misty rainbows, prompting me to pour like a tropical monsoon, reflecting it's spectrum shadows like red poppies under a crimson nostalgic November, orange embers from a dying bonfire, yellow pages of a forgotten book, green moss covering a timeworn tombstone, blue jay upon wilting royal forget-me-nots, indigo horizons slipping into midnight and a violet velveteen silhouette in a dimly lit basement. In windswept moors all I wish for, is for you to allow me to rest upon your blossom, like a raindrop - even if it's synthetic. I'm forlorn in a fathomless fate, where the Grim Reaper sits on his throne as the king of kismet. He was once was an unseen predator, but now, with enchanting enthusiasm, he's playing the organ in my hymn of death Its musical pattern keeps repeating in my head, like recurring nightmares. But when turquoise tides return at dusk, I hope to wash upon your bronze shore, shimmering like a trail of neon planktons. I can't keep blaming the pain, so let it pour... And let me live.

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Date: 6/10/2024 11:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your first-place win Dear Silent. Cheers.
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Date: 6/8/2024 1:34:00 PM
Congratulations on your winner in this contest. Way to go. I like the way you approached the theme. Keep on writing. Sara K
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Date: 6/5/2024 9:17:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful rain write with a great picture. I love to hear the rain on a hot summer day... Have A Blessed Day Writing Away With Your Win...........
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Date: 6/5/2024 8:11:00 AM
Dear silent one this is the best take ever written for the rain prompt. And wow the quote that youv written here is so good! I dont know how you come up with such lines! Truly! Left me in awe, amazed! And i must highlight how unique and innovative your word pairings and some metaphors in this were! So captivating and soulful! So many lines stood out for me especially “pantomime portrayal” nocturnal nightclub” “autumnal aroma” and kurt cobain line! Depicte the exhaustion and innermost emotions so eloquently! Using metaphors imagery and such artistically emotive alliterations, to paint a very poignant and profound picture, so poetically! So fitting for the prompt. Congratulations on your 1st place win! Well deserved
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Date: 5/25/2024 4:49:00 AM
You are perfection with Aliteration dear friend. This poem for me feels spiritual, within your search for harmony, there is no better way to find this harmony and face your angst than through writing your so mesmerizing poetry, so write on SO., Hugs, Blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/24/2024 7:42:00 PM
Great imagery and alliteration. That quote you made up is amazing
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Date: 5/24/2024 12:09:00 AM
This wonderful poem has so many beautiful alliteration references that I don't even know where to start. All I do know is that it should be awarded the highest prize, it is so worthy. You are truly the King of Alliteration. Bravo and good luck in the contest...Hugs
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Date: 5/24/2024 12:35:00 AM
Oh and a fave of course
Date: 5/23/2024 9:36:00 PM
Your poem with deep undertones of pain and nostalgic longing has touched my heart. You never run short of beautiful alliterations. Your quest for harmony is beautifully described in the following lines. "I hunger for harmony, desiring for juniper and jasmine, to weave and wrap their tendrils, tenderly around an alchemy of angst". As ever, you prove once more that you are an unrivaled poet. All the Best dear poet friend. Love your beautiful quote.
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Date: 5/23/2024 7:16:00 PM
Astounding. I miss reading your terrific and magical words. "In windswept moors all I wish for, is for you to allow me to rest upon your blossom, like a raindrop - even if it's synthetic". We don't mind having somethings regardless of its originality. We just want them. A great one Silent.
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Date: 5/23/2024 7:09:00 PM
Dear SO, wow such a fantastic poem with captivating alliterative lines enveloped the reader in a beautiful and poignant embrace. I particularly appreciated the imagery in lines such as "I shiver in the sunshine, soaking from secretive somber storm clouds" and "creating an autumnal aroma, so I'm wondering why it's raining in summer, weeping on fading misty rainbows." The longing for life expressed in your poem is almost spiritual, and the colors described reflect the beauty of nature that can deeply touch the soul. I thoroughly enjoyed your ornate vocabulary and descriptive delivery. Another Fave, with my best wishes for the contest.
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Date: 5/23/2024 5:57:00 PM
so let it pour... And let me live. I believe as you pour out your poetry you get healed my friend, it doesn't get better than this, a fav from you
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Date: 5/23/2024 5:19:00 PM
Your spiritual poem captured my heart. So many captivating alliterative lines that wrapped the reader in a beautiful and poignant embrace. I especially liked these lines: I shiver in the sunshine, soaking from secretive somber storm clouds, creating an autumnal aroma, so I'm wondering why it's raining in summer, weeping on fading misty rainbows, Best wishes with the contest and enjoy your evening, Sara
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Date: 5/23/2024 4:56:00 PM
the longing for life is almost spiritual in your poem. The colors reflect the beauty of nature that can touch the soul of a poet
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Date: 5/23/2024 11:54:00 AM
Your touching words and lyrical flair intertwine exquisite beauty with an unrequited longing for what is both within our grasp yet ever elusive. Rainbows, silver linings, and abiding love are concepts bound to take a heavy toll! Good luck --a fave! Robert
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Date: 5/23/2024 11:09:00 AM
WOW! A fabulous poem, SO, woven in splendid alliteration. Much enjoyed your descriptions delivered in ornate vocabulary.
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Date: 5/23/2024 10:53:00 AM
SO, interesting how the weather can take us on a journey. I can identify with the grim reaper being a little closer than I would like. Your ending suggests what I also feel...let's hang on and enjoy what we are doing as much as we can come rain or sun.
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Date: 5/23/2024 9:36:00 AM
reflecting it's spectrum shadows like red poppies under a crimson nostalgic November…and so begins a beautiful verse… Faving this poem!
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Date: 5/23/2024 8:01:00 AM
Dear Silent One, I found your poem to be very moving. The raw emotion you convey touched my heart. I loved how you blend longing, pain, and a desire for harmony. Your artistic words really create a hauntingly beautiful picture that lingers in my mind. I found this one to be very evocative and heart-touching. - Blessings, my friend, Daniel
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