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Raindrops 2 Contest Sponsored by JCB Brul - 07/02/24

Fictional poem for contest

Brooding nimbus darken the sky suddenly clouds burst Rain drops thunder down then subside to a gentle pitter patter on the Perspex conservatory roof I watch as raging rivulets of rain run down the windows and hear the old drains gurgling at the deluge of water I peer outside as the pitter pattering ceases to see the sun She’s playing peek a boo from behind a cloud Huge puddles have formed on the stone flags Millie, my young granddaughter grabs my hand “Come on grandma, grab your wellies” she giggles “Let’s go out and jump in the puddles”.. And so we did!

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 7/24/2024 2:29:00 PM

Jan, you're making me smile. It's great to be a kid and to be able to derive joy from these simple acts. There's still a kid in me and still smiling!

David Crandall

Date: 7/21/2024 8:58:00 PM

Great description of the rain, great pictures, and a great time jumping in puddles!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/16/2024 1:26:00 PM

Back with congrats, Jan!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/16/2024 9:34:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your fun "Raindrops" write again. What a fun day in the rain you have here. Have a wonderful day with your win.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/14/2024 10:12:00 PM

Grand word painting. Congratulations!

thriveni c mysore

Date: 7/14/2024 9:08:00 PM

such a happy scene, a giggling child playing in the puddles. happy writing. Congratulations dear poet.

Jay Narain

Date: 7/14/2024 10:17:00 AM

Lovely poem.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 7/14/2024 7:10:00 AM

I just love this! Sweet and pure, like the rain. Congrats and God bless you, love, Gina

Christina Bowring

Date: 7/6/2024 8:21:00 AM

This is such a lovely read dear Jan. It’s so atmospheric and draws you in. I love the imagery of the rain pouring down the windows ( we had torrential rain last night with a thunderstorm) Your little granddaughter sounds gorgeous - little ones bring out the child in us. The pure innocence of this delightful poem is so touching. Really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing. Hugs and smiles :):)

Sand Blown

Date: 7/3/2024 1:19:00 PM

...a nice write....'puddle jumping'....well, nowadays it's all walk around the puddles ....as a kid, a favorite was to put on rain coat and boots and walk in rain storm..... ...stan

Lin Lane

Date: 7/3/2024 12:01:00 PM

Jan, I enjoyed every one of your free verse lines. I have splashed in puddles with my granddaughter, Eloise. "Come on, Nana. Let's play in the rain!" I feel like she's almost as much yours as she is mine, since you ask for pictures of her all the time. lol And now Grace can be yours, too. Brennan has been for 8 years, and they'd love you as much as I do. Hugs!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/3/2024 1:44:00 AM

A great poem for the contest. As children we often play, splashing our puddles.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/3/2024 1:46:00 AM

Thanks Victor it always makes me smile seeing the little ones having fun after the rain:-) hugs Jan xx

Deb M

Date: 7/2/2024 2:37:00 PM

Puddles the best fun Ever!! Fun playful poem Jan from Isle Of Man! Lovely….Debx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 3:35:00 PM

thanks Deb. I wrote this in between exam support last week and forgot to post it till now, in fact i wrote it for raindrops 1 contest and it filled so quickly as did this one! hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/2/2024 2:08:00 PM

charming and delightful, jan! you almost fooled me, though - i was trying to remember you talking about a grandchild, but then realized in your response to a comment that, duh, poems can be fiction, too! (guess i never write those...)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 2:11:00 PM

It was fun to write, yes I wish i had grand children to spoil but hey ho such is life but at least I can imagine if only in my poems:-) hugs jan xx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/2/2024 12:17:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your fun "Raindrops" write. What cute pictures. Puddles & kids go together... "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a great day writing away..............

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 1:34:00 PM

thanks Paula I will drop by and read:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 7/2/2024 11:29:00 AM

Puddles are a magnet for Kids, I used to work out in all weathers but now happy to watch from inside lol. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 1:34:00 PM

aww go and have a splash with the grand kids Tom lol:-) hugs jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 7/2/2024 10:51:00 AM

because all "children" regardless of age know.....that puddles are for jumping in.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 1:33:00 PM

oh so true John and i love kicking up the autumn leaves too lol:-) hugs jan xx

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/2/2024 9:03:00 AM

…then subside to a gentle pitter patter on the Perspex conservatory roof… and hear the old drains gurgling…love it all…a great last verse! Great imagery, onomotopia and alliteration! Hugs ~ Kim

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 9:24:00 AM

thanks for the superb comment Kim, glad you enjoyed my poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/2/2024 8:42:00 AM

Great imagery and happy feeling of the fun she'll have in the puddles. My grandbaby sure can't seem to ignore them.

Eve Roper
Date: 7/3/2024 6:45:00 AM

Hopingly you will have one, one of these days if your son decides.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/2/2024 9:23:00 AM

I wish I had a grand baby Eve, it sure used to be fun jumping in puddles when i was little! hugs Jan xx