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I smelled rebirth as the petrichor emanated from the ground, carpeted by grass across the field. Termite mounds sharply rose from the ground like tiny watchtowers, waiting for the long, awaited rains to come. Some birds sang tunes prophesying the coming of the long, awaited rains, with only scattered clouds as a sign of a slim-chance downpour. Trees were still green, probably anticipating the new life that would seep right into them. Fish in the river sometimes poked their sharp noses out of the waters' skin, curious to feel how it felt like when a raindrop hit them, after the skies cracked open. My grandfather always told me the gods emerged from the sun, in a ceremonious fashion, to crack the clouds open to release rain. A long time I gazed at the sun, waiting for someone or something to come out of it....

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Date: 7/6/2016 3:03:00 PM
Enjoyed your creative take on this topic, Teddy; lovely imagery, too. Congrats on a worthy win. // paul
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/7/2016 6:55:00 AM
Thank you so much Paul, for enjoying my work, and applause!! :-)
Date: 7/6/2016 5:20:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Teddy:)
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/7/2016 6:51:00 AM
Thank you so much for your applause, Jo!! :-)
Date: 7/5/2016 2:51:00 PM
Not only a beautiful poem, but I love the unique and perfect layout of each line, Teddy! Excellent poem,, that captures the mood and the flavor of the rain!
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/6/2016 3:24:00 AM
Hi Carrie. Thank you so much for your applause, and enjoying my work!! *^_^*
Date: 7/5/2016 1:21:00 PM
Big congrats to you Teddy! Your formatting here really caught my eye, and for me, it came across as a puddle, with rain dropping on it, creating sort of ripples. I enjoyed the vivid scene that you painted here... I hope it's ok, I think you missed a word, I was wondering what the fish were poking out-- their sharp something... nonetheless, I really enjoyed this and wondered with you, of what would come cracking out of the clouds. Thank you for entering my contest!
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/6/2016 3:22:00 AM
I really enjoyed your contest...it was fun!! ;-) Thank you so much for your applause, choosing my work, and noticing an error on my piece!! *^_^*
Date: 7/5/2016 11:50:00 AM
Nice presentation...very good words choice. Congrats :)
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/6/2016 2:50:00 AM
Thank you so much for your applause, Sunita!! *^_^*
Date: 6/3/2016 9:27:00 PM
I really like your entry into her contest. Knowing Nikko, I think she will love the style you used here too. Good luck in the contest. I need to get on the ball and think something up.
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 6/4/2016 3:25:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea!! *^_^* I took time to create that elastic, fluid feel of my verse... I'm sure you'll come up with something really awesome!! ;-)
Date: 6/3/2016 5:19:00 PM
Beautiful descriptive imagery Teddy - i love the idea of the clouds being cracked open to release the rain - delightful thought:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Teddy Kimathi
Date: 6/4/2016 3:18:00 AM
Lol, thanks Jan!! *^_^* If you read most African mythologies, you'll laugh your heart out!! ;-)

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