Rain

I        smelled rebirth           as       the      petrichor       emanated
from the       ground,          carpeted by grass
across           the field. Termite              mounds sharply rose
from the               ground like            tiny            watchtowers,
waiting for the                     long, awaited             rains to come.
Some birds sang tunes                  prophesying the           coming
of the long, awaited rains, with only scattered clouds
as a sign of                      a slim-chance downpour. 
Trees                    were            still green,           probably anticipating
the             new life that               would seep right into them.
Fish in the river             sometimes poked               their sharp
noses out              of the                waters' skin,
curious                 to feel how it felt          like when a raindrop
hit them,               after the skies             cracked open.
My grandfather               always told           me           the gods
emerged from the sun,         in a ceremonious           fashion,
to crack the clouds open to release rain.            A long
time I gazed at the sun, waiting for someone
or something to come out of it....
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016


Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 7/6/2016 3:03:00 PM
Enjoyed your creative take on this topic, Teddy; lovely imagery, too. Congrats on a worthy win. // paul
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/7/2016 6:55:00 AM
Thank you so much Paul, for enjoying my work, and applause!! :-)
Date: 7/6/2016 5:20:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Teddy:)
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/7/2016 6:51:00 AM
Thank you so much for your applause, Jo!! :-)
Date: 7/5/2016 2:51:00 PM
Not only a beautiful poem, but I love the unique and perfect layout of each line, Teddy! Excellent poem,, that captures the mood and the flavor of the rain!
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/6/2016 3:24:00 AM
Hi Carrie. Thank you so much for your applause, and enjoying my work!! *^_^*
Date: 7/5/2016 1:21:00 PM
Big congrats to you Teddy! Your formatting here really caught my eye, and for me, it came across as a puddle, with rain dropping on it, creating sort of ripples. I enjoyed the vivid scene that you painted here... I hope it's ok, I think you missed a word, I was wondering what the fish were poking out-- their sharp something... nonetheless, I really enjoyed this and wondered with you, of what would come cracking out of the clouds. Thank you for entering my contest!
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/6/2016 3:22:00 AM
I really enjoyed your contest...it was fun!! ;-) Thank you so much for your applause, choosing my work, and noticing an error on my piece!! *^_^*
Date: 7/5/2016 11:50:00 AM
Nice presentation...very good words choice. Congrats :)
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 7/6/2016 2:50:00 AM
Thank you so much for your applause, Sunita!! *^_^*
Date: 6/3/2016 9:27:00 PM
I really like your entry into her contest. Knowing Nikko, I think she will love the style you used here too. Good luck in the contest. I need to get on the ball and think something up.
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 6/4/2016 3:25:00 AM
Thanks, Andrea!! *^_^* I took time to create that elastic, fluid feel of my verse... I'm sure you'll come up with something really awesome!! ;-)
Date: 6/3/2016 5:19:00 PM
Beautiful descriptive imagery Teddy - i love the idea of the clouds being cracked open to release the rain - delightful thought:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
Login to Reply
Kimathi Avatar
Teddy Kimathi
Date: 6/4/2016 3:18:00 AM
Lol, thanks Jan!! *^_^* If you read most African mythologies, you'll laugh your heart out!! ;-)
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter