Rain

The sun beats down on the hot desert sand
As she brushes their silken white mane
No fairer mistress lives throughout the land
Her beauty as rare as the rain

Left behind by a nomadic tribe
Scandal surrounding her birth
Arabian white horses always by her side
Her only family to speak of on earth

A virgin so pure and spirit so free
No one has spoken her name
She is as refreshing as drops from the sky
They simply refer to her as the Rain

You can see her riding an Arabian white steed
Anytime night or day
No other horseman can match her speed
Is what the locals say

Foreigners think when they speak of the Rain
They are talking of drops from above
But it’s this girl they worship who has no name
That they shower with all of their love

The sun beats down on the hot desert sand
As she brushes their silken white mane
No fairer mistress lives throughout the land
Her beauty as rare as the rain


By, Joe Flach
For Constance's Contest, "Rain, The Story"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 1/14/2011 9:25:00 AM
Congratulations Joe on your win in A Rambling Poet's contest "Rain,The Story". Love, Carol
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Date: 1/13/2011 4:19:00 PM
Joe, I loved the way you made this just be about an actual person and not a mythological character as I did. It is unique and you used wonderful imagery to compare her to rain itself. Congratulations. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 1/13/2011 1:05:00 PM
Beautiful imagery... Congratulations on your win in Constance's Contest, Joe. Always, Annalise
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Date: 1/13/2011 11:57:00 AM
A very creative story, Joe. As a rider I know how fast the Arabian horses can move. While reading this, I had great images of Rain riding her horse. Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/13/2011 11:25:00 AM
A lovely, romantic piece. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 1/13/2011 6:35:00 AM
Congratulations on this well deserved win in the contest of Constance, Joe
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Date: 1/13/2011 3:21:00 AM
beautifully woven tale!! cheers for bagging a great win in the contest, joe!! : ) nette
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Date: 1/12/2011 9:09:00 PM
Many Congrats Joe on big win with this imaginative verse.Best wishes/Luv - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:32:00 PM
Congrats Joe on your amazing win in the Rain Story contest with this elegant entry my friend.. enjoy another top ten victory and success with luv..
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Date: 12/28/2010 3:59:00 AM
Nice personification of the rain girl with good flow of words, Joe
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Date: 12/28/2010 3:24:00 AM
Beautiful! Good luck in the contest.
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