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Written for personification contest sponsored by Tania Kitchin

I am a metaphor for tears, born from murky clouds, pouring gracefully or rampantly, in a choreography of liquid grace, dancing to the sound of pitter patter, upon rooftops and window panes~ but I am mercy, flourishing your crops, nurturing roots of blossoms, softening hydrated lands. Yet cursed by climate change, I am blamed for human neglect.

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David Crandall

Date: 4/20/2024 10:36:00 AM

I enjoyed this Ink, the language you use in your personification of the stuff that pours "in a choreograph of liquid grace", reminding me of why I like it - especially the sound of it when I'm drifting off to sleep.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/7/2024 10:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your lovely "Rain" write. Today's showers bring the May flowers... Have a blessed day writing away..........

Tania Kitchin

Date: 4/5/2024 4:58:00 PM

Ink, beautiful imagery, congratulations on your winning placement.

Duke Beaufort

Date: 3/29/2024 10:31:00 AM

IE, you integrated beautiful images with science--I am so impressed. Rain is such a wonderful thing to watch and experience. You express the words with so much simple and elegant grace all at the same time.

Tonye George

Date: 3/29/2024 3:26:00 AM

I love the metaphor for tears. A dance in the rain, so much tears would drip. "but I am mercy, flourishing your crops." Loved this line. Without rain how would we eat? Loved how you portrayed the rain.

Valsa George

Date: 3/27/2024 9:45:00 PM

Even the ordinary phenomenon of nature is made highly symbolic as a metaphor for tears and an agent of grace. In this poem, you have included many thoughts of current relevance.... man's total neglect of nature, the drastic nature of climate changes, and above everything the benevolent and graceful effect of rain..! ..."pouring gracefully or rampantly, in a choreography of liquid grace," What splendid imagination! Into my FAVE.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 3/27/2024 4:28:00 AM

Loved the sounds of your rain falling. Gives one a melody by itself. So long as I don't get wet, I love the rain. It seems to clear the air and clean the streets. Well written, dear poet.

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:10:00 AM

Thank you so very much dear victor always a pleasure hearing from you

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/26/2024 11:02:00 PM

This one is fantastic. You completely captured the essence of rain, Ink.

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:13:00 AM

Awwn i tried being simple haha. My last personification was .. a bit confusing. I hope i did it right this time im happy that u liked it

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 3/26/2024 9:05:00 PM

A beautiful poem with a love for the earth., your poem was warm like a summer downpour.

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:24:00 AM

Awwn you are so kind dear hilda, thank you so very much truly for always being so supportive

Joseph May

Date: 3/26/2024 4:01:00 PM

Very nicely penned, we have only ourselves to blame for climate change

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:25:00 AM

Thank you so very much dear Joseph

Tom Woody

Date: 3/26/2024 6:30:00 AM

I am liquid grace, I am mercy... Such awesome word choices. Rain often gets a bad rap, in fact it's raining here now and the wife had to cancel her planned activity. But it's a gift from God and nourishes the planet, as you poetically describe.

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:26:00 AM

Tomsz, thank you so much always for being so supportive always grateful

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/26/2024 5:59:00 AM

Rain speaks eloquently in your words, Ink :---pouring gracefully or rampantly, in a choreography of liquid grace, dancing to the sound of pitter patter, upon rooftops and window panes---I am mercy, flourishing your crops--well said, indeed!

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:28:00 AM

Awn thank you dear Vijay! I am always grateful for your kind and generous support truly. Your poetic presence is much appreciated always

Silent One

Date: 3/26/2024 5:21:00 AM

Your personification is excellent, you did very well being rain.. Is it your favourite element? There are a host of wonderful lines here, from the beginning with you saying you are a metaphor for tears, that is so simple, but so clever.. Really loved the line about liquid grace, I guess when it is warm rain it will dance so much better than when it is heavy rain like a monsoon.... I am mercy.. so, so true, lookat all those countries that have no rain and suffer.. very clever Ink... I can see

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:29:00 AM

Awwn thank you for seeing that i did put alot of thought in this and for thinking this is intellectual. That means alot to me! You are truly such a gem: i appreciate your presence poetically and beyond. Thank you always

Silent One
Date: 3/26/2024 5:22:00 AM

You used a lot of thought and intellect in this one, instead of just being a drip.. The ending is brilliant and really profound, so so true.... It has been raining a lot here in the UK.. We've had the wettest February and start to March in over 250 years.. All the best in the contest..

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/26/2024 5:01:00 AM

Ooh, this is good. I like the twist at the end. I suspect I will see this do very well. Best of luck in the contest.

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:43:00 AM

Thank you dear richard, always good to hear from you

Marugu Mo

Date: 3/26/2024 4:31:00 AM

in a choreography of liquid grace. Love that line

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:46:00 AM

Awwn thats so kind of you to say thank you so much

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 3/26/2024 1:41:00 AM

What a beautiful poem . The flow of it is really good . And the metaphors too .

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:49:00 AM

Awwn thank u dahlin alwYs

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 3/25/2024 9:51:00 PM

metaphor for tears,born from murky clouds, oooo beautiful start… choreography of liquid grace, * snaps the fingersssss* .. I am mercy, flourishing your crops, ooooo intresting aeee papi.. nurturing roots of blossoms, softening hydrated lands… love the delicateness of that line .. gorgeous piece papi

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:49:00 AM

Aww papi thnk u always

Paige Hind

Date: 3/25/2024 3:32:00 PM

This poem is filled with truth. How lovely to write about rain like this, beautiful

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:50:00 AM

Awwn its always so good to hear from you dear paige

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 3/25/2024 2:50:00 PM

Dear Empress, I just loved how beautifully you captured the duality of rain, symbolizing both tears and mercy. I feel you really evoked a sense of empathy for this natural phenomenon, highlighting its essential role in nurturing life while also acknowledging its scapegoating amidst climate change. Dear Empress this is such a thought-provoking piece that invites reflection on our relationship with the environment and our responsibility towards it. Wonderfully insightful and a Fav! - Blessings, Daniel

Ink Empress
Date: 3/27/2024 10:51:00 AM

Awwn dear daniel, thank you so very much for the fave and also your thoughtful and heartfelt comment. I an always grateful for your support truly