Beryl Edmonds Poet Rhyme

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Written - 30th January 2024

Quagmire, Quest, Quiescent Words Poetry Contest 

Sponsored by: Constance La France 

 

 

 

Quagmire

If you walk on ice, you chance your life.Quote - Poet’s own
Was Christmas nineteen sixty three
When this story happened to me
Snow had fallen down thick and fast 
So cold it was, weeks it did last.

Gone against parental advice
A friend and I skated on ice
It was on a local canal 
Felt it was safe, me and my pal.

Wrapped cosy and snug we both were
Hat, gloves, scarf and boots lined with fur
Some lads were there, knew them from school
As boys do they acted the fool.

One came and snatched my friend's hat off
"Hand it back nasty boy" I scoffed 
The boys then ran off with her hat
I chased them alike a wildcat.

To my horror the ice it cracked
I fell in, at the edge in fact 
Clinging on, “save me” I did shout
The boys came and they pulled me out.

I slunk home wet, cold and hungry 
Through the back door so none saw me
The parents would have exploded
If they knew what had unfolded.

It was a fright of a Quagmire
A warning to not play with fire
Never walk on frozen water 
Sons, daughters do what you oughter.

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Sara Kendrick February 18, 2024 at 3:54 AM Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go! Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Sara K

Robert Sidwell February 14, 2024 at 9:03 AM Wow! Loved it! Such a fun and engaging way to tell a story. Congratulations!

Constance La France February 14, 2024 at 5:03 AM Beryl, excellent story poem, and congratulations on your placement in my contest, I love your quote also, hugs, Constance

Paula Goldsmith February 13, 2024 at 12:53 PM Back with Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write/quote again. Enjoy your day with your win.

Bill Baker February 6, 2024 at 10:52 PM Nice entry for the contest, Beryl. I think it will do well. Good advice you give to others. Thanks for sharing your life experiences with us through your fine poetry. Your poet friend in Texas, Bill Beryl Edmonds February 11, 2024 at 2:18 AM Thank you poet pal Bill, maybe writing this will stop someone, somewhere taking a chance on ice. Beryl

Susan Manley February 3, 2024 at 6:27 PM Its odd it can freeze so unevenly. But springs and previous breakages in ice make it very dangerous. Love the story in a poem with a cautionary tale. It certainly cements the advice, careful on ice. Beryl Edmonds February 11, 2024 at 2:16 AM Thank you Susan, it was a very dangerous thing to have done, thankfully I’m still here to tell the tale. Beryl

Sotto Poet February 2, 2024 at 7:15 AM You have displayed an impressive choice of theme and executed it with great finesse. Your word selection showcases your exceptional skills, Belle. I wish you good luck in the contest. Beryl Edmonds February 11, 2024 at 2:14 AM Thank you Sotto, writing this has brought the memories back, it was so frightening at the time. Beryl

Victor Buhagiar February 1, 2024 at 9:29 AM I can picture you falling on ice. Many moons away I was at a hotel in North London and as I began walking into the street, I skidded down. The pavement was all ice. Had to return to change clothes; Beryl Edmonds February 1, 2024 at 10:19 AM Thank you Victor, what happened to you happened to me too, many years ago, trying to walk on ice I slipped and landed flat on my back, thankfully someone came and helped me up… Beryl

Silent One January 31, 2024 at 12:22 PM Nice selection of theme and you did very well with the word.. best of luck in the contest.. Beryl Edmonds January 31, 2024 at 2:27 PM Thank you Silent One, the memory lingers on… Beryl

Paula Goldsmith January 31, 2024 at 9:53 AM I really enjoyed reading your write/story/great quote. Good Luck in the contest... Have a wonderful day writing away............. Beryl Edmonds January 31, 2024 at 11:45 AM Thank yo very much Paula, I’m pleased you enjoyed the read. Enjoy writing away too… Beryl

Deb M January 31, 2024 at 12:09 AM Brilliant Belle…what a story! Your lucky day!! Did you ever share your story with your parents when you were older? Debx Beryl Edmonds January 31, 2024 at 12:44 AM Thank you for reading my tale of woe Deb, I never did tell my parents about what happened, but then I never told them anything bad that happened to me, I was a timid child for reasons best left in the past and kept things to myself… Beryl

Jeanette Swan January 30, 2024 at 6:34 PM A very memorable day (assuming it is a personal story). The boys turned out to be decent kids after all. And in the days before preventative helicopter parent styles. Thanks for sharing an interesting childhood story in verse. Beryl Edmonds January 30, 2024 at 6:45 PM Thank you Jeanette, it is my personal story and it still gives me the shivers when I think about it, how lucky I was to survive, thanks to those boys. Blessings, Beryl