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Pythagoras

 
Pythagoras was a mathematician.
He taught mathematics in ancient Greece.
He created a now-famous theorem.
You can bisect a rectangle or square.
Draw a line between opposite corners.
This will result in two right triangles.
The two sides opposite each right angle
are commonly called a “hypotenuse“.
The sum of the squares of the base and height,
equal the square of the hypotenuse.
 

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Leo Larry Amadore Date: 2/21/2012 9:28:00 PM An enjoyable piece, with perhaps a couple of easily fixed errors: first, a rectangle or a square may be "bisected" in a manner that does not result in two triangles (you would need to specify that they be bisected from opposing corners); second, you write: "the side opposite each right triangle,/ is commonly called a 'hypotenuse'" --I think you meant to write "the side opposite each right angle" instead...overall, a clever piece. And you do not need the comma you asked Russell about. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Robert Pettit Date: 2/21/2012 9:45:00 PM You have supplied me with the most helpful comment I have ever received for any of my submitted poems. I followed your advice and made your suggested changes. Adding a tenth line gives this work a "decimal" quality. This is much appreciated.

Russell Sivey Date: 2/21/2012 7:54:00 PM You did however miss a punctuation on the line, "The side opposite each right triangle", you may want to fix that if this is for the contest. Login to Reply Robert Pettit Date: 2/21/2012 7:59:00 PM Russell, are you saying I need a comma at the end of the line?

Russell Sivey Date: 2/21/2012 7:49:00 PM What a brilliant write this is! I love how you brought "the theorem" into light! You described each part rather well! You did well with the narrative form! You'll do well in the contest! Awesome Work!! Login to Reply