Pulling Out

The train left the platform amid trails of smoke
That blew across faces
Waving away worn smiles.
The grey sky leaned into the horizon
Forming a broken arc,
Rain moved into chains of grief
From the departure.

A wind stole the voices
Leaving the sad opening,
Moving the sound away from this cold space
That no-one would see again.
An emptiness filled the station
As they left, scuttling like
Hermit crabs searching for new homes.

20.01.19

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 10/14/2020 10:11:00 AM
Great poem Suzanne. Images that came into my mind were those of children being evacuated during the war, the film Brief Encounter..just any goodbye / departure really and all evoked beautifully in a poem deep in imagery with great use of personification, pathetic fallacy (do I have that right here?) It's a poem just oozing atmosphere. Great!
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Date: 10/3/2020 9:08:00 PM
I like your metaphors and imagery in this poem, Suzanne. Well done and enjoyed! :)
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Date: 10/5/2020 5:53:00 AM
Thanks Laura, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
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