Puerility

Childlike wonder fades, In the mirror, time's soft theft. Hearts once light, now weigh, Dreams of youth, a distant breath, Wisdom's price, the joy it left.

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Gershon Wolf

Date: 4/15/2024 7:57:00 PM

This is everything a superb tanka should be. And I like them even better when they rhyme. A FAVE for me. Thanks, gw

Don Iannone
Date: 4/15/2024 11:32:00 PM

GW, thank you. Tanka are fun for me. Cheers, Don

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 4/8/2024 4:55:00 PM

you've beautifully captured the essence of time and the loss of childhood innocence with powerful brevity. I enjoyed it. Wishing you a pleasant evening, Sara

Don Iannone
Date: 4/8/2024 10:04:00 PM

Thank you, Sara. Well-said. Yet, the child lingers inside each of us, unexpectedly showing itself in our lives. Cheers, Don

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/8/2024 6:33:00 AM

Hello Don, your poem reflects on the passage of time and the loss of innocence artistically. I loved the imagery of fading childlike wonder, and the weight of wisdom's price evoked a sense of nostalgia and melancholy. Your words capture the bittersweet essence of growing older and the inevitable transformation of youthful dreams. - Blessings, Daniel

Don Iannone
Date: 4/8/2024 6:52:00 AM

Daniel, thank you for your wonderful words. They mean a lot to me. Don